AWWWWWWWWWWW

This could really be a full out story and not a one-shot. I loved how you had the characters personalities set up and I really liked the ending to the story!
Keep up the good work!

I really liked it! Even with such few words, you were able to convey both Tinystorm's and Redstar's personalitites exceptionally and create a great atmosphere of conflict.

Best one-shot or challenge ever! I love. It but it could be turned in to a full story!

This was awesome! I loved it, the tense moment with the mother and ivypaw! Ughh I loved it so much!

Very detailed and well written; challenge accepted! I liked the beginning and how you added extra to it!