This story was great, it was beautiful, it was engaging, it was exciting, it was ... it was ... PERFECT

OH COME ON I WAS WAITING FOR THEIR REUNION

love the transition XD
"more determined than ever...
he was struggling.."
XD

Lockhart...

Lockhart. Lockhart? LOCKHART?!

That was an amazing story, one of the best I have ever read. All of the fight scenes were so descriptive; I could picture everything. Normally I despise all OCs, but I actually enjoyed yours, so good job with that! Honestly though, there are no words to describe how good this was...

Awesome story, can't wait! :)

please update the sequel!
:)

I'm enjoying this story so far - quite an interesting premise. It's too bad about the character death this chapter. I know this is a completed fic, but I do suggest going over it to fix the spelling and grammar. I think that would make this story even better because the mistakes I'm reading detract from the overall plot. But I definitely want to read more!

Hi,
I was just reading the training scene between Alex and Merlin, and i realized something. You're a fencer, right? That's why your using words like circle parry and beat attack.
It's nice to finally read a story that is more realistic, even if the fencing style of a beat attack etc is not completely compatible with sword fighting... that I know of.
keep up the good story writing

Wow! What an amazing story! I really enjoyed read it... good job, truly!

... this. story. is. amazing.

This is amazing! I really enjoyed reading this and I can't wait for the sequel!

And I super want to read Arthur's reaction next time he tries to use Merlin as a training dummy...

Who knew James was going to use dark magic to save his brother Merlin. Will anything Merlin I'm alive back in Camelot with Arthur by his side.

What will happen next
Kind writing more can't wait to read next time.

Continue continue read read read

This is a one in a million fanfiction that is pure GENUIS! I loved it. You should feel proud in this creation, it is utterely stunning. I love the way that you pretty much created an entire NEW KINGDOM with there own laws, knights etc. It really sets the scene. It is very hard to do that as a writer. To create an entire different setting for characters- almost as hard as creating a storyline that flows well with the characters and the protagonist and antagonists. WELL DONE! very eager for the next installment.