So far it’s been canon with a token visit from Janet to Privet Drive then replacing Neville and the Weasleys with Draco and the Davis’ while at the Alley. So much for any kind of character progression he’s had over the past two years.

Did you mean "the Slytherins' strong defensive tactics"?

I love Harry's anger at the headmaster.
"run-down" should be hyphenated.

I think Remus is a far better alternative as owner of Scruffy as Hagrid was. It was funny as all heck, Scruffy barking at Snape, though. It sucks that Tracey and Harry got a detention because of it, though.

Did you mean "girls' dormitory"?

Did you mean Tracey was carrying a plate of "corned beef and veggies"?

What kind of biscuits did the house elves serve Tracey and Harry with their tea?

I wish us readers could have gone to the Dursleys along with Narcissa Malfoy (not because I want to spend any time with the Dursleys (I don't), but the interaction would have been fascinating).
Those squashy, purple sleeping bags always make me come over so covetous.

"textbook" should be one word.

Did you mean "the cat's name was Crookshanks"?
Did you mean "he could hear someone screaming"?
Did you mean "his own parents' deaths"?

I'm suddenly wondering if Harry's non-punishment after he blew up Marge Dursley isn't a ploy of some sort to lull him into a false sense of security.

I like the assonance in "arrange alternative accommodation".
Did you mean "having to carry"?

Brilliant take on this! onto the next one xox

I just started reading these (home sick from work) and I really enjoy them!
I like the twist but also that you've been able to keep true to the original.

A great sequel to the previous story! Well done!