I want to point out a big mistake in your part in the world of Touma Science and Magic do exist but they exist separately by a certain treaty it isn't until a certain World War that Magic wants to destroy Science the only difference in the world of Louise is the primitive technology they have because they are in the Medieval times compared to the modern age.

Usage of modern-time lingo in a world with a setting based on Medieval Age Europe by one of the world's inhabitants seems a bit weird.

Please continue I need this interesting story to survive!

Love it. I really hope you continue with the series and I see great potential. I actually hope Tabitha will be in Touma's harem plus I truly see comedy gold.

Well, people, get ready for an almost free-for-all battle

I'll keep reading this, I found it very interesting

ok chapter 2 was good love to see what happens next keep going with this great story

Is Amee an AU portrayal/incarnation of Kirche?

I'm torn between wanting to read this, or shunning this since it barely had any research done on FoZ, particularly the side characters.

I like your story idea but please proofread it or get a beta, because your story have so many mistakes in spelling and grammar.

Punctuation, dammit! Where the hell are you?! The narration needs your glorious commas, periods and apostrophes!

good story love the Othinus &Touma relationship can't wait read more of this story but will touma have a harem there as well or will othinus scare them off

...Why does the narration has good writing and a good english but the dialogue are all in dire need of editing?