Hi, i really like this book, its great, also im writing a book like this. Anywas i really think this is a great BOOK, keep it up :D

are u lot for real how many of u actually read the heroes of Olympus series yes Nico fell into Tartarus but first of all it's 0art of his dad's domain, secondly he goes by himself thirdly he gets captured immediately, so what bullshit are u talking about, secondly, yes annabeth is as useful as Percy but not as powerful, Percy singlehandedly defeated two titans a giant, a primordial, a lot of monsters and one of u said oh what hasn't the rest of people done how many of them can control poison, yes Nico 8s powerful but don't forget he is being trained by Hades himself, so yes Percy 8s the most powerful not Nico, Nuico was barely in Tartarus when he got captured, talkless of Percy being in a foreign place and having to fight his way out during the son of Neptune, yes Jason didn't have his memory either but u want to compare the two journey, and lastly it literally said that Nico was captured not long after he was in Tartarus. and was kept in a comatose state

It was good story however I hate how you make Percy seem like the most powerful person because you make it seem like the stuff he does no one has ever done it before. I personally think that Nico (who for some reason was barely included in this story )could have gone through the same but we don't know since Rick riordan didn't show what Nico was doing when he was this has many plot holes and all the characters seem OCC.

I hate when Annabeth and Nico don't get a reaction but Percy does. What had Percy done that Nico/Annabeth haven't done?
Percy- held up the sky!
Annabeth- I held it too!
Percy- went through Tartarus!
Annabeth- I went through it too!
Nico- Been there done that at the age of 14, while seeing the true form of Tartarus, without help from Annabeth/Bob/Damasen/Small Bob!
Percy- kind and loyal!
Nico- actually visited Bob, who Percy manipulated, and was also the first to talk to Hestia in years!
Percy- went against Hades!
Nico- risked Hades's rage multiple times freeing Percy/getting Hades to join the war!
Percy- woke up Gaia!
Annabeth- yep, me too!

So... this story does have a great premise, but it also has loads of Flaws, and some characters feel incredibly forced. For example, the "golden trio" is very OOC, Hermione and the others being portrayed as very dumb on many occasions, and Harry generally being a jackass for a lot of the time. On other Occasions, while I can understand why Riptide would be able to strike Wizards somewhat, because of Hecate, Riptide still cant hit mortals. If you redefine the laws of that, please point it out, otherwise its very annoying.
Also, the demi-gods, who are naturally impervious to nearly all magic (i.e. Last Olympian; Sleep and Time spell), except executed by gods, is also looked over and never explained. It really annyoes me to no end, since that way the atory feels very forced. Also, as help called by Dumbledore, I would guess that the trio is antagonistic based on the hunch of some sort of tattoo somewhere, as that is very OOC, considering that in GoF, the fake Moody was somewhat more violent, but no real indication for most that he was a deatheater, and in OoP they only used security questions, and except for Malfoy didnt bother most. Also all antagonistic people where more or less confirmed death eater to be, and Hermione would be a lot smarter than that.
End line;
great premise, but not all that well written out, since a lot feels like a plot line, and not a story. Problems could easily be averted by more explanation and a bit more realistic, or just in character reactions. Otherwise just an OOC/ bashing warning.

I have been readiing the whole stories you have written
big fan from India
You made a big mistake as riptide does not harm mortals and

umm thalia has green eyes

I love this book because it’s actually pretty long and because it’s interesting. When most of these Percy and Harry books they are not and I think this book could like actually be a really book. I really enjoy it

Love

Now,I’m really hating the name Dumbledoar,he is so dumb

Worth the read. I had a great time watching your writing improve over the course of the book, even if it was hard to read in the beginning!

Thalia turned to Thalia

I fel like it wouldn't be fair to read this whole crazy long story and NOT comment on it, so here I am. I read this for my girlfriend, who really liked this fic when she was younger, and it was certainly an entertaining expirience. It was cool to watch your writing evolve and improve as the story went on, and i'm really proud of you for sticking it out, amidst the love and hate, and seeing this story through to the end! My favorite scenes were literally all of Percy and Dumbledore's interactions, the scenes where annabeth was unconscious and percy stayed with her, several scenes with Percy and Harry, and last but not least: Nico in the greenhouse. I wish you luck in all your future writing endeavors, and thanksfor writing this! :)

there's nothing wrong with filler. in fact, there is a series that i have read that i recently has basically 6 entire books full of filler, good quality filler, but filler nonetheless.

As I keep reviewing every time Nico gets the wand, poplar trees are the official trees of the underworld, so I would think he would get that, but you're entitled to your own opinion. Anyway, good story so far!