Snape should be dead. Never leave a murdering enemy alive-they'll stab you in the back. Likewise, never leave weapons behind.

Very rarely one reads a more disappointing story. A good general idea plagued by inane comments, and two unrelated side stories about Ron and Percy that could not be more infantile and boring. Written good humor is very hard to achieve, harder yet in a long, long story.

I was going to give you points for completing the story, but even that you didn't do. You put an END there, where it doesn't belong. And an OMAKE... really?

I normally thank ANY writer for the effort, good or poor. You I just can't. You wanted reviews, so there!

I read this straight through. Good MOB romp.

Sorry to sound like the grammar police. Commas are great. This chapter made it look like they were eating owl for breakfast.

it's a blood feud don't matter if they have wands or not the rules are to kill the other side on sight

once a blood feud is declared the only way to stop is the death of everyone on one side of the feud. so either snape and the other's that worked for him to do the attack or harry and nev. it can't be called off once it is declared by saying sorry

they tell here not to tell anyone they can do wandless magic she's agrees and then the first thing she does is tell someone breaking said trust

I know ron is dumb but really he's a pureblood if he had centaur anywhere in his dna he would not even be at Hogwarts

of course the poison is easy to get and impossible to trace shit writing

Dobby Hefner, I like it!

I have this guilt. I can't stop laughing about the same sheep. Really shouldn't be that funny. Oh well maybe I'm regressing. I'm over 50 so that's allowed right? Very white sheep...snort, giggle.

This was exciting, interesting, and a joy to read. Thank you for sharing it.

You really need a few beta readers to go over your grammar, it’s atrocious.

You have some truly excellent ideas and some unique plot twists that I am really enjoying. However, your English skills need some strict attention. One cat: cat. More than one cat: cats (NOT cat's). One Potter: Potter. More than one Potter: Potters (NOT Potter's). There are NO apostrophes in pluralizations. This is Primary School English you need to review. Belonging to one Potter: Potter's. Belonging to more than one Potter: Potters' (or Potters's). The possessive requires an apostrophe (with a few exceptions: his, hers, ours and theirs).

You have some unique twists and I am enjoying your plot progression, but you have some major issues keeping the tense of your writing consistent. You need to pay more attention to your verb tenses; you are mixing past and present tense, occasionally in the same sentence, and this makes your writing very hard to follow.

Keep writing! Your writing can only improve if you pay more attention to every single word you type. You should also review proper use of the comma, as you have many misplaced. Try reading what you have written out loud; that will often bring to light any inconsistencies.

Please do not take my constructive criticism as a slight on your storytelling. You have talent for bringing your own characterizations to an imaginative plot line. Further grammatical editing can only improve your writing.

Thank you for your contribution to the world of Harry Potter Fan Fiction.

Dusted. Mind you, Harry might have tried curare. Dewing the wool the sheep could give a $#! and it's a narcotic instead of a fatal paralytic when taken orally.