This is well written but needs some narrative.

Very adorable! I'm finding myself scouring the internet for s. stories and sad. I've challenges myself to write 1million words for Hermione, but Viktor has seriously come in and demand ed to be a part of the show. for BrinzeQueen7, my best suggestion is to write what you would want to read.

Cool

I loved it! The way they connected, it's perfect.
The only thing that wasn't really perfect is the him/her at the beginning of every line - this way, I only learnt who is saying what, but I know nothing about the background. Well, what they said told enough - it's mostly my personal aversion against this kind of dialogue. So, in the end, the content was very good since I still read it all :)
I especially loved that you touched the topic of muggle-borns and their difficult family situation. The last comments were hilarious, although I wonder if they...?

I wanna write a story n I'm kinda new.. how do I do it?