Wow this is really good. YOu should write more.

I enjoyed the over all tone of the fanfic, but you failed to mention Remy a.k.a. Gambit in the story line. Is there going to be a third chapter posted soon. I was left hanging at the end, who us the mysterios man the doctor handed the baby to? Remy maybe. I enjoyed the fanfic, I hope more is on the way. I can't wait.

Ok... um.. the doctor wasn't real subtle I liked it please right on agin soon. I thinking the baby's not dead.

well that was a bit short, could have passed as a 1 chapter story. Also not much of a plot line, Where was Remy? Did she find out she was pregnant in the second chapter, Apirl, then gave brith in May? But I did enjoy the ending cause most stories like this everyone lives happily ever after. I didnt see that comeing!

well that sucked.

but the baby isnt dead is it? that evil dr. guy is ploting sommat.

and waht happend to gambit?

ah nononononono thats not cool go get her back

more please soon please

go raven thats what you are good at please

Cryptic but intriguing plot.I would say delve a little more into this understated style might suit, I don't know, I'd have to know exactly where this is going. As I see it, I'd write a bit more between the lines, while perhaps maintaining the scalpel-scientificness of Rogue's fragmented , check over-ness. Check check check! Heck, apply for a beta.I'm sure there are enough in the X-Men world to suit.(*curses lack of suitable betas in HP world, also curses lack of ellipses*)

You have a great start! You might want to make your chapters a bit longer though. However, you've captured my attention _

Oh! I like it! But the chapter's could be a little longer. Any way please update soon.

Your chapters are very short, but it's *still* very interesting! Please continue! And maybe bring Remy into the story at a later time...?

Ok, here comes that standard complaint.

Too short chapters.

Aside from that, i realy hope you continue writing this story.

Well, now I’m intrigued. Who’s this Dr. Henson character, and why is Rogue allowing him to give her shots when she doesn’t even know what they are? For all she knows he’s killing her baby. I’m also wondering why she left Gambit and the X-Men, and why haven’t they tried to look for her. I mean, if Raven can find her I’m sure Remy and the rest of them could as well...

I’m definitely interested in seeing where you’ll take this. : )

awsome i cnat wiat for mroe please soon pelaseeeeeeee

Good start. Don't stop writin'.

Hope ya put Remy on next chapters. He's soo cute!

ps. sorry if I wrote something wrong cuz English is not my first language.