This was beautiful, I loved it!

Aww, I love this! And especially the end. The ending was just perfect!

I’m honestly not entirely sure what I was expecting when I starting reading this, but I can tell you it was not something so completely both heartbreaking and heartwarming at the same time. The writing was perfect and you did an awesome job characterizing Shiro and Pidge. I loved reading this.

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ASDFGHJKL THIS IS ALL I'VE EVER WANTED IN A FANFIC THANKKKKKKK YOUUUUUUUUU THIS IS BEAUTIFUL!

I like what you're going for in this piece. It's very long, though; I think it could be condensed or have some sections cut without changing much in the story.

Certain aspects don't ring true for me. For instance, Shiro is very responsible, so I think he would do whatever he could to get a healthy amount of sleep so he could function as the team's leader.

I can understand Shiro's body involuntarily overreacting to a surprise like someone else sneaking around, but does Shiro really think an intruder could have entered the castle without any of them noticing? Doesn't it have better security than that? "In the name of Princess Allura" seems like a mouthful and probably wouldn't have much of an impact on an intruder.

It seems kind of hypocritical for Shiro to lecture Pidge about how she needs sleep, when he is going to such extreme lengths to avoid doing so. "sleep is important for a growing girl" sounds inane and condescending.

"Hunk's declare" should be "Hunk's declaration" or "Hunk's declaring". I think "preferred forgotten" should be "preferred to forget".

Your syntax creates a nice flow, but sometimes it seems like you use a few too many adjectives and/or adverbs, like "entirely easy" and "mere thought" and, at various points, "very".

When Pidge mentions Rover, does she mean the Galra droid, or her family's dog? The dog's name was revealed to be Gunther.

I don't totally buy Shiro's insistence that they'll find them alive and his demanding "Understand." He knows it is possible that one or both of the Holts might die before they find them. I'm sure he would reassure Pidge and encourage her to avoid worrying and falling into pessimism, but he can't just tell her that those fears are invalid. Also, his saying "Why so?" seems unnecessary after Pidge already explained her reasoning.

Pidge and Shiro both have dialogue in one paragraph, when they compare the room sizes. (I don't see why the sizes would be different; they look like minimally furnished guest rooms and I imagine they're uniform.)

What do you mean by "rightfully" in regard to Shiro carrying Pidge to bed? "had had to have" is quite redundant, and I'm not sure if it works grammatically.

"shut closed" is redundant.

I'm a little confused about at what point Pidge hugs Shiro at the end; it sounds like it happens twice, though there was no mention of her letting go. And whether or not she is crying-you describe "her voice strong and unwavering" though she was just sobbing.

Oh, god, poor Shiro. He's still so young but he has so much on his plate. I'm glad they're there for each other.

Yeah, if this could go ahead and be in season two, that'd be great.

Hey now
That amount of feels was entirely unnecessary

Well, there goes my heart
Pidge and Shiro's realationship is so beautiful, I love how you wrote it! I actually cried a little watching Pidge talk about her nightmares and how hard it is for her to don't lose the hope, and Shiro's nightmare too, but the best part definitely was Pidge helping him to calm down at the end, all of this is so beautifully written that I hardly can find words to describe if, I don't want to say it again but, really, amazing work! Thank you for writing this!

The deep emotions you portrayed from Shiro and Pidge were incredible and heartfelt, to such a degree that even I was moved to cry along with Shiro after his ordeal. In the anime, Shiro's psychological distress is minimized, but I always wondered how he survived with the past experiences plaguing him of his time as a prisoner. The mental state in which you wrote Shiro fills the void the anime cannot fill. Also, the likeness of Pidge's own nightmares compared to Shiro's shows a connection between the two and how it is that Pidge can understand Shiro and help him through his panic and terror. On this note, thank you for writing such an incredible story. I hope to read more of your wonderful stories in the -Of-Winter

Augh, that wrecked me. I laughed pretty hard at Pidge being caught with her hand in a cookie jar, and then Shiro and Pidge's conversation nearly made me cry from just how much they trust each other and how Pidge and Shiro make a mutual connection about the nightmares, and then the last sentence came, and now I'm dead. Dead inside.

This was so beautiful. I love interaction between Shiro and Pidge, and I both believe you described it perfectly and it's cute. I sure wish you could write more stories for this duo.

You've captured this so well, it's amazing.

OH my god, my heart. This is so so good! I'm practically about to cry! Loved it!