You shoulda totally try now cos there’s nothing wrong with your writing. Personally I’d love to read the one with Kono seeing Gracie with Virgile.

Interesting idea. Could you write a chapter where Steve learns about the story?

Danny could have been a cop who was undercover as a criminal.

please update

Was hoping to see something like this where Danny is Turk and he doesn't have to hide it exactly as due to technicalities hasn't/cannot be convicted but also he's not volunteering the information up anymore than Steve does about the stuff he did as a SEAL.

Questions/suggestions
What would be/how Danny's actions would differ with Turk been his background?
Did Yen meet Kono while surfing?
If not able to do direct conflict what about stiff polite interaction with Rachel and group due to Stan?
Moments where people think, Grace is definitely Turk's kid.

Really like this one any chance of seeing more?