Can you like, kill off Anna and pair him with a RWBY character, preferably Weiss or maybe Cinder, I would say Blake but you have her with Sun.

I'm not saying this because I hate Anna, I'm saying this because this story has too much OCs and you also paired David with a OC, that's too much imo, when this is a RWBY based story and there should be more RWBY elements.

And I think many people would find a OC pairing annoying that, I know I do.

Currently this just looks like an exact rewrite of Volume 4

Niiiiiiiice.

welcome back

that was informative
so what's your response to my chapter 12,13, 14 reviews

my thoughts exactly and it put up a fight but against multiple opponents who can coordinate their attacks and combined with speed the nukelavee doesn't stand a chance
david would probably notice that they'd be found a little too easily by haven troops

well considering david is probably just as powerful as the legendry silver eyed warriors were back in the day
so rwby chibi season 2 begins in may

that's what i want to know and since its a grimm then maybe ruby's silver eye power could weaken it enough for david to finish it off and that nukelavee grimm needs to be stopped and fast
With ruby's current emotional state that grimm doesn't realize that the conditions for the activation of the silver eyed warrior powers are there and all it needs now for the powers to activate someone close to ruby getting killed in her sight then that grimm is so screwed

hmm this is getting interesting and with episode 50 up next what are your expectations?
if rwby gets a fifth volume would you continue this story into volume 5?

This is a nice story. I wonder why it seems I've read it before?

Oh yes, I have, in two forms actually. One was the episodes that I've watched. The second was the canon script. The only real difference being that there are little quips and actions from the OCs that don't actually hold any weight to the story... aside from being placeholders/background observers for canon dialogue/events.

I think I'll just stick to watching the episodes and reading the script.

well this was entertaining and how can alex defeat a ninja since he is a ghost right
we've not had yang since volume 4 chapter 4 and i wonder what epsilon and yang have been up to
but to be honest with qrow's condition deteriorating and i see him surviving to the 50th episode of rwby at best

hmm oc's are going to die?

Make the next chapter awesome

Lucky save.

Oh boy this will be fun.