XD I laughed quite a bit while reading this. You're a very good Author! I'm excited for more, but take your time with it. Don't post unless you're satisfied with what you wrote. Seems next time!

NALU! IDC ABOUT HOW LONG I HAVE TO WAIT AS LONG AS THERE IS NNNNNAAAALLLLUUUU!

FINALLY UPDATED! FKLSDJFSNDVJLSDN FJSNDFJBDSNJVN SJDLB

~Throws anvil~ WHERE HAVE YOU BEEN..BTW love the story

Weirdo :}

no worries and i wonder what anime wendy and erza like...lets hope those two stick with the inoccent anime

Can I just say that this story is my dream comes true! Like I only really have one friend and we go to different schools so I have always wanted to meet my online friends like lucy!

Mira ;)

nice hope you keep going

This feels very similar to Virtual Flames, by MissyPlatina, right down to using Haru and Elie as fictional characters.

Not that you ripped her off or copied her or anything, this is fanfiction, everything we do is copying something, I just think you should inject more of a twist or a spin on this really common formula. It kind of feels like the story is following pre-established train tracks without much originality. Simply making the theme 'Minecraft' isn't enough, especially because it's barely mentioned.

I also didn't really sympathise with Lucy's character, her Dad didn't do anything wrong. Lucy came across like a spoiled brat and I felt sorry for him and his girlfriend who are trying to get on with their own lives.

I liked things like meeting irl, first group chat, first webcam, and them goofing around in Minecraft. But then again, these are all well worn out tropes of fanfiction. I think on a grammatical level you're a decent writer and your dialogue feels real enough, story pacing is fine as well.

I guess my recommendations going forward are as follows:
1) Write something memorable that separates you from other fanfics.
2) Make Lucy more likeable. Why would Natsu be interested in her? She currently has no character outside of 'moody'.
3) Expand on character building scenes. Too often you start a scene (eg. Truth or Dare), write a little, then skim over the rest to end the scene. These are the golden moments where we meet and learn about the characters and their quirks and relationships. Don't race past them for convenience.

Good luck!

HOLY CRAP FUNNIEST FACE REVEAL R3ACTION EVER!

GEEEEEEEEEEE! OMFG! I WANNA KNO WUT HAPPENS NEXT! AND SO DOES BOB THE CHICKEN *laughs at really bad inside joke* OMFG! THEY KNO! 3

AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHBHHHH! OH GOSH NATSU YOU ARE SUCH A BAKA!

AMAZBALLS! Excited 4 next chap!

Minecraft? How old is she, twelve?