Please do update, your story was simply amazing. I loved the concept of ichigo being the death, this could open a whole new story line. Please try to continue or update or just rewrite it, but please do try. And last, if you do decide to write it again keep ichigo more mysterious, I like it more that way.

YES! please update! There aren't so many stories of Ihigo as Death on this site.

The grammar and technical parts of the story are well done (a few mistakes, nothing too distracting), but I don't think this is for me.

I didn't like how Ichigo explained everything and revealed how he looked. I would have preferred that things stay mysterious as it seems weird that "Death" suddenly decides to be sociable and starts explaining secrets that no one should know about.

And if you continue this, just keep the canon pairings. As for Tonks: keep her single for a while, maybe she never gets in a relationship again. Things like that do happen.

These are just suggestions, ignore me if you wish.
Have a good week and God bless,
SomethingAncient.

this is really different I usually read funny stories but this one caught my eye.
it is a interesting story I liked it a lot hope to read more by you

Cool an interesting idea

Well written and interesting scenario, though the execution of the bet was IMO staged in a way that Sirius just couldnt loose and the whole death eater marks that function as control panels was unnecessary, furthermore it wouldnt be any of deaths business IMO.