Please update as soon as possible.

Nice story! I really like the pace and amount of time spent working on the characters. Cheers

Damn this is good!

Glad it makes you happy when people review, because you have a great story so far. It's nice to see a fic about Reaper.

Reapers being a dick, I wonder what tracers reaction to reaper now

I like your way of portraying reaper, keep it up

Feels like a movie, so far.

Good chapter, but I admit this particular chapter didn't seem to be going anywhere until Lena mentioned the attack. I hope we get to see Reaper in action next time. I'm a fan of action and of secrets being revealed, so to see McCree and Zarya chat about stuff they already know is a bit unexciting. How about McCree ask her directly "Why'd you join Overwatch now? Russian government didn't want our help." Then she'd be forced to reveal something we don't know that has current bearing on the story or to deflect the question. Maybe she wants to be the next Jack Morrison. If you tell she grew up in poverty etc etc it doesn't have any bearing on current story, but on the other hand "Those manufactured scrap killed my parents and my older sister. This is her gun. I'm going to finish what she started. When I have this gun, it feels like she's with me, and when i tear the machines, she's laughing." (As a bonus, if something happens to her gun, Zarya would be royally pissed). Reveal something we didn't know and that makes any character bad ass or hurting (preferably both). I believe everyone in Overwatch is bad ass and hurting, everyone.
Last chapter, I liked WM's duality inside her head. I'm not sure that Reaper threatening her was the best way to convince her to join him (she'd look for a way to run at the earliest opportunity) Personally, I'd prefer if Reaper told her the benefits of killing talon and what's in it for her, perhaps manipulated her (empty promises), excited her, made her believe in a bright future and made her want to help him willingly. I just always pictured WM as femme fetale, she could have anything and anyone she wants. She could be confused by having 2 conflicting wants due to Amelie (kill Tracer/befrend tracer), but she's Got firm opinions and is not hesitant about other situations. she's powerful and confident mercenary, perhaps fuelled by the rivalry with Reaper to become better and hence she may dislike him, but I don't think she'd let him walk over her or be intimidated by him. It came across that she was a bit weaker than I'd thought she'd be. She can still cry over romance novels and have 2 voices in her head, but be more "You ruined my things and have the gull to sit here? Get the f*** out of my room!" Armed or not be damned, he ruined her stuff! You know what I mean? (Btw, I can't picture her being unarmed. She'd have a concealed knife, poison trap, her grappling hook, maybe even a sneaky pistol. I imagine she''d have it figured out to plan F how to get Reaper with those tools. Remember, everyone is bad ass and hurting.) Otherwise I wonder why Reaper would even want to recruit her if she's so weak and intimidated. Someone else could just intimiate her to their side.
I offer my opinions in good faith with the hopes of stronger future chapters. None of this was meant to hurt, and as you said yourself, you want to improve. Another thing, and I was guilty of this too, is to not say how bad/not your best work/slow this chapter was. Let the people decide this for themselves. If you're really worried, say it in a positive way- I hope this chapter wasn't too slow! I hope you liked this chapter and please review. The idea is to try and not let your lack of confidence show or the people may perceive an otherwise ok chapter as a mediocre one.
Keep writing, you'll get better just by writing more. I was hooked by that promise of Reaper getting new high tech, and I can't wait to see him do crazy things with it and have gazillion tons of opposition and everyone's shocked reactions. I don't mind bonding, but i always believe in bonding through difficult situations, not chatting at a dinner table. Bonding through dragging an injured teammate under fire, or through being surrounded by enemies, or through helping another without being asked. Each scene in your story counts. Is it bad ass and hurting?
I'm happy to offer suggestions on your future chapters if you want to take my opinions on board before you post them. Just send me a PM.
Keep at it. Overall, your story has tons of promise and I can't wait to see how it turns out. I'm looking forward to the next chapter! Happy writing!

Cool.

Wow you actually responded to my thing about Reaper, thanks. Great story so far, can't wait for more.

The reveal about WM having a love novel and a sketch book was pretty interesting. That makes me hope Amelie still in WM's mind. Reaper's such a dick with handling the sniper's things; it fits him perfectly. Reaper being able to clone himself now is a daunting ability to deal with. The OW team will probably need everyone in perfect coordination to take him on.

Agent Smi... Reyes is on the prowl

Beware!

Reaper works with Talon not for them. But other than that, great story so far!

I really like the story so far! Can't wait to see Reaper's new abilities in action.
I don't mind filler characters, as long as they don't take over the story.
Reaper's already bad-ass, now i just fear for anyone he'll go against.
Looking forward to the next chapter!