Great story - I can't wait to read more. I noticed a few strange punctuation and spelling issues, but it didn't interrupt the flow of the story at all. I hope you write more soon - this is very compelling.

Oh. My.

This... could get VERY interesting.

BTW, nice to see you writing in the Maraverse again.

So glad u wrote some more... still sad you killed Jordy though.. update soon!

~Jem