This is a wonderful Idea for a story, and you do a surprisingly good job of putting it to words, but it just doesn't flow right for me. You're doing excellent though, and I applaud you for writing anything at all. Overall I give you a 5/10, and hope you keep writing stories

Interesting story here so far.

Please more Story of chapters this story and more of Harry and his Harem in this story!?

Please more Story I what to see Story please!?

I like (and somewhat dread) the idea of an adult "hot chocolate". An *iced version* already exists - the White Russian (either Smirnoff OR Stoli, milk, and Kahlua).

Cool 2 chapters continue please.

excellent story so far

Update this please and update often

Exciting and please update this story this 2017 of August or july and until then

great start

I've heard of the last - typically, it's made with cream sherry (Harvey's is the typical brand of sherry preferred), and is the *hot* version of the Black Russian (which is made with vodka, cream, and Kahlua and served cold). Either are good and "safe" (in the sense of being nearly Murphy-proof) drinks to order in a casino - either at the rail or at your table/slot.

Eh, I wouldn't say that. The average wizard has a wide range of spells that allow control of the battlefield, defensives, and has movement superiority(teleportation trumps fast running every time, the only exception would be Semblances like Ruby's that focus on extreme speed). Sure physically the average hunter in training(Academy students would be those going to prep schools like Ruby was before she got scouted while hunters-in-training or HIT stands for those entering academies like Beacon) could more than likely beat the average wizard like a drum, but that is because they are getting trained for combat unlike Wizards and Witches. Now someone like an Auror or a Death Eater, a HIT would find themselves on a much more even footing where talents/abilities/Semblances will end up being the deciding factor. Actual huntsmen and women like Glynda or Ozpin would actually be as good as Voldemort(Dumbledore is actually much more skilled, not even including the Deathstick, he just handicaps himself from using generally defensive and subduing spells rather than outright attacking. Its why the prophecy stated Dumbledore couldn't kill Riddle. I mean if you noticed in the Battle in the Ministry scene between Tom and Albus, you'll notice Dumbledore doesn't actually fire any truly offensive spells at Riddle yet matched him step for step.).

Aside from a little clean up, the story is rather good idea wise. You should mention the HOW they got from Remnant to Earth and back(personally I would go with the portal idea in an unconventional location that will prevent NoMaj from finding it).

As for the how both Lily and Harry could have survived, you could go with the fact both had their Auras unlocked at the time of being AK'd(after all, Aura is the soul manifested and has several defensive properties. I could see Lily activating Harry's Aura as a child in a desperate attempt to protect him with only an idea on if it would work or not), having hid her the fact she was an Aura user from James mainly to avoid him blabbing to Sirius, Remus, and Peter considering how paranoid they were at that point. The scar on his forehead could have been intentionally added by Lily(to keep up the false trail of blood magic) or Dumbledore(to make a symbol out of the boy's victory as a child)...

hope tis continues

Great story