So you literally gave Bella sexually experience for no reason. You are vague with her previous encounters JUST because it's convenient.

Her thoughts and dialogue would ok if she were a virgin but she is not. Going off previous words, far from it. So why are you having her act like one?

YOU can't have it both ways.

So exactly how many men has she been with? You make her sound like a slut by literally glossing over her sexual experience with lines like these.. 'All the other times were half hearten compared to this.' That's not word for word but that's Bella's thought.

So exactly how many men has Bella been with? That's such a odd way of having her answer that question.

wonderful story

Hello. I just read all 25 chapters and I love this story! Now I realize that there are no more chapters. How disappointed I am, but I am hoping you will update soon. Kudos on the great story! Thanks, Suzan Noerr

Loved this story. Loved it!

Thank you for sharing.
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I have loved reading your story these past few days. However I have to add that I’m so glad I came across it when it was completed. I don’t think I would have had the patience to wait for it to update lol. Thank you for finishing and congratulations on your educational accomplishments. I’m glad you changed Bella and Ellie as I was wondering what would happen between Bella and Edward and how they would make it work. Thank you for sharing your talent with us 3

Good story. Thanks for sharing.

Love this

I love Bella’s little speech about life and love. Everything that is wrong with the original story, right there.

I used to sing that song to my kids when they were small.

I’m loving this so far. I just came across from teh lemonade stand.

I love the story . The writer has the best idea about Bella & Edward. Three “Cheers” to you.
Please don’t take any offense on what I am going to say next, I would like to remind the author that ... women is plural form of woman ! Hope you understand what I mean. Thank You.

I just wanted to pop a comment in here real quick about how enthralled I am with this story so far! It is so moving, filled with hope but also dread which in my mind is a hard thing to do! Your writing is soooo sooo beautiful it brings tears to my eyes. I havent been this into a story in about a year. Keep writing because you are amazing!

Really good fic