The poem was awesome

Awww

:) :-)

This is great

At this point, its like we're not even talking about Lily anymore. I usually hate to leave negative comments however, this is too uncharacteristic of Lily to act sappy and lovesick. Lily is supposed to be level headed and of a fiery temper and person who syands up to herself and definitely not a meek and shy character willing to bend for the wills of a few. And she is supposed to be the most powerful witch of her time and yet she couldn't get away from people with title. And so easily persuaded to play a whimsical character in place of a princess. Who are we even talking about. And James isn't supposed to this weird either. I get this is AU but at least keep their personalities in check.

Although , judging by the amount of people calling you out for plagarism - I have little doubt for no person writing for real could potray Lily as badly as this.
Remember, Lily was powerful enough to counteract the killing curse from Harry to Voldemort. That takes a strong character, not weak whimsical china doll you made her appear to be.

The only reason I made it this far was a slight hope that you'd character build but at this point the story is just a drag. It was slightly intriguing for the first 2-3 chapters and everything weny downhill from there.

I'm sorry to be harsh but the truth needs to be told.
Sincerely,
An avid reader, stickler for accuracy.

YES FINALLY WOO WOO WOO

AHH i cant wait till james finds out that "gabrielle" is actually lily... eek! :)

Going through my favourites and re-reading stories. I enjoyed this again for the second time. I think there could be a little more drama and argument in the big reveal. Both of them have been known for their quick tempers in this story. I also feel the characters you created lose who they are after everything is known. Lily has been the centre of attention and dealing fine playing as Gabrielle and suddenly she's not okay with the attention. It doesn't make sense, and there could be a remark based on the difference of someone else's life and her own life. Thank you for sharing, I really appreciate it.

That was a sweet story. Hoping to see more of your writing!

Beautiful... Absolutely Enchanting

Sweet little story. Thank you!

Did you end up joining the army? Anyway, this was a fantastic story! Great job and I hope that you still find time to write nowadays.

A very cute fix! But do consider making your chapters longer than your author's notes.

It was an excellent. Fairy tale

Cute