Thanks for continuing the story. I'm liking what you're doing with it and the little references to other lines and animes are funny. Hope you'll have time to continue this eventually ️

Please continue! This is one of the best stories I’ve ever read!

You did really well with the chapter. And since I haven't reviewed the previous chapters (I was just reading through and didn't have the patience), thank you for continuing this story :) There were grammatical issues, but otherwise I think you did really well with the plot and the characters (though I'd read anything, I really love this story). It's interesting to see Haruki stumble and overcome his problems. I'm looking forward to seeing what you do with the story in the future.

The story you adopted is very well written and you're good at integrating it with your own plot points.
However, there are some things that need to be corrected if you want your fic to be uniform in quality:
- there's a rather distracting lack of proper punctuation throughout your continuation of the original writing. A beta reader could help.
- spelling mistakes are the second most common error. A beta reader could help with that.
- some grammar mistakes appear, but not consistently; you probably only need a beta to proofread the chapters before posting.
- finally, you switch from 3rd person narrator to 1st person without rhyme or reason. Worst of all, your writing switches tenses when you switch the narrator's voice. If you start writing in a past tense then you cannot switch to the present tense randomly only because you decided you wanted to write in first person. You can switch the narrator's form, but the tenses should remain consistent at all times.
I'm sure you'll get better at writing in no time if you keep these things in mind and ask for help with proofreading.
Good luck!

please update the FF to ch 12! it's amazing!

I just noticed how long it's been since you've updated. I really hope you haven't abandoned this story as well since I was really sad to see the original version stop and was glad to find this. Now I'm wondering if I should keep reading and getting invested again . I really hope to see more chapters soon.

Not cool to promise to finish a truly great story line this, and then abandon it. Shame on you!

You know, I am getting used to stories not being utdatert for whatever reason. It is not understandable normally, but an accepted faget of this site. What annoys me is someone sayng they will continue or adopt the story to finish it, then write the same thing with maybe a chapter, and then drop it. It is truly disrespectful to the fans. Noe cool!

this story is lit ass hell. I love it so much and hope u update soon

Pelo amor de deus continua!

I've read this story over and over again. And it is a masterpiece! Each chapter draws me in and I can't enough of it.

I’ve read this story so many times in the past few weeks, it’s that good. Considering that you adopted this story, I can’t find any difference between your writing and the original author. The story and style blends together smoothly. Keep up the great work! And please, please update! This is so good!

This will be constructive feedback, I hope.

There are quite a few spelling errors (e.g. Komo vs Kumo) and several paragraphs are too chunky and could stand to be broken apart for easier reading. That said, the charm of the original story is still present in the crazy things that Haruki does, so well done with that.

omg, welcome back! Thanks for the update :3

THIS STORY IS EVERYTHINGG! So good