I wanted to like this because of Mistborn but I think there are a lot of better ways to show intensity than with UNENDING CAPITALIZED SENTENCES THAT STICK OUT LIKE A SORE THUMB.

Might I recommend you get a beta to edit some things for you? It sounds like a good story, from all the reviews, but getting past the first chapter is pretty rough.

interesting story so with with a fun bloodline to play around with looking forward to more

Great story continue it as soon as possible please

That was cool

Hi are you going to continue with this story I really enjoyed it so far and really want to finish reading it.

noice

i am a big Mistborn fan. i like what you have so far. one thing i was wondering was if you were going to put in Feruchemy? also can his clones burn the metals in his body? it would burn faster and he would run out alot if they could but it would bee cool. thank you for all your hard work writing this and look forword to more soon

really good fic so far i only have one concern will naruto still know a good amount or a lot of ninjustu ?

hell to the yeah! mistborn?! yes please! deus ex machina ftw! i was wandering were we getting kelsier/vin level or elend...elend lol so almost OP but he had crap control...which makes a lot of sense for naruto...

keep up the good work great job happy face