the whole naruto arc feels very empty I mean he made little to no progress in developing a relationship with his family and left as soon as he took their money and what about the mansion of sexy maids it just feels like the whole going back home was a waste of time

please don't take this as me hating on your fic if you have a reason for making it like this I guess I'll just have to wait and see

LOL

Awwwww my teeth are rotting lol

So the writing does seem to improve, but not until around chapter 40-50. Skimming the latter half, the story seems interesting, but it’s not really readable for the first 40 chapters.

dude wtf, i thought this was a NARUTO fanfiction, no one cares about a crossover

this makes so little sense! regardless of the fact that Naruto being there should change things it isn't even internally consistent. I'm having problems, either being consistent or fix the language. I'm giving this a chance because I hope that it gets easier to read without confusion, though it is interesting.

why hasn't Naruto grown any taller? it has been a 'few years' since he arrived at ten years old and was already 5'8" so I would have assumed he'd have grown at least a few inches. I know I grew about a foot during those years.

you need to have a English beta double check your story

Jezus and i hoped it will be at least redable considering prievious crossovers but nooo you have to nerf naruto to bullshit degree and make it so fucking paintfull to my eyes... there are few hundreds naruto/harry potter crossover but maybe less than 10 is redable the rest can't understand that ninja IS OVERPOWERED against wizard with expections like wards or AOE magic

Your grammar sucks

Can someone PLEASE Beta his work? This is gold, but deciphering it is making my head spin!

you need a beta

Holy cow how much one piece chapters am I skipping?

Naruto is a really lucky guy ya know

Wtf does naruto have red or blonde hair?! Or both? But why alternate form calling it red or blond? All the grammer errors and spelling I can ignore easily enough but this is just confusing.