hi! maybe you could put a little more feeling into yourwriting. it seems a little bland, so try to add more detail. other than that your writing is great!

Loved it!

It has potential, I think spacing it out a bit more, more detail would improve it greatly because I do like the story-line. Don't fret too much about bad reviews, they used to upset me also and I hated them. But you can turn it around and view it as a way to improve your writing, see what they didn't like and why :)

1.2/10

Awwww