I don't think it is too OOC. What does that stand for by the way? I never really knew I got the general gist of it sure but the actual definition I have no idea. This is a really good story and I think it shows how hard it is sometimes to have all that expectations on your shoulders weighing you down.

Not bad, but what about curfew harpies?

Amazing! The only thing I noticed that could be fixed is that "jack" in 'Blackjack" doesn't need to be capitalized. Anyway, you captured Blackjack's personality perfectly, and I just really love this idea/plotline!

This is overall pretty good, just a couple of weird parts. I also really like the friendship between Percy and Jason. Is this a one shot or are you going to make more chapters?