I'm confused here. school in France ends in like June or July so how is Marinette 6 months pregnant in the spring when she was due in December/January? Always make sure your story flows correctly.

This story is just amazing! You are a very good writer with amazing ideas.

I cannot continue reading the story because I find it stupid that Marionette didn't even think let's get another morning after pill regardless whether or not she think she's pregnant because she has had unprotected sex. Or get checked out by the doctor. She doesn't know who Chat Noir is at this point so she doesn't know if he's got any diseases and passed them on. It's being completely irresponsible and then she's deciding to keep it regardless of discussing it with the father first, and thinking throug all of the consequences-unlike Tikki, plus not getting that pain checked out- can be something really nasty. I find that completely out of character for someone who is quite responsible and (most of the time excluding trying to talk to Adrian) sensible.

OK this was... fine,

I'm so confused how the seasons work, it's sumer but it's also new years wtf?

hawkmott hasn't akumatized anyone cuss cloe is not there to anger anyone lol, at least that's what anyone would assume

Destiny is going to be great. I wonder if she'll have her own Tikki in the future.

I am not trying to be down on you but I would like to know where you got most of your information about pregnancy from and if you have experienced it yourself before as there was a lot wrong with the way you wrote Marinettes pregnancy and the terminology you used for a lot of it.
It was a good story otherwise and I enjoyed most of it thank you.

Actually...I like Verry long chapters

The story is great but the writing sucks. I have already read it completely before and tryed again but could not is just so repetitive and some things about the pregnancy are just so out of place. The idea behind it all I great and if you cut through the descriptions and most character ideas it could be mucho mejor for the reader to experience it.

OMG! That was EPIC and AWSOME! And OMG now I can't stop thinking of what Alya would say when she realised her bff was ladybug and cat noir was her crush, and... I'm just imaging Alya freaking out right now, OMG SHE'S GOING TO KILL MARINETTE! XD

So , the writing its self is a little ruff , alot of explaining things twice... sometimes u would just keep writing the same thing over and over , i found myself wishing their was more of the charecters talking to eachother and less discribing. Also im 29 and a mother of 2 , i can honestly tell you that 1st time moms are more likely to be in labor 8 hours or more , also i feel like mari was almost to emotional, yes, prego women have mood swings, but where not crying all the time, it just seemed like both adrien and mari cryed atleast once ever chapter . An another thing regular doc appts should start as soon as you know ur prego and prenatel vitamines should be consumed. And a big thing! U shouldnt have skipped over the rap scene it was z major part of the story abd should have been in it. But Honestly most of the problems with the story could have been fixed if u had some one to go over it for you, before u posted it .
But! On a positive note,
The story made me want to know what happend next no matter how hard and long it seemed some times(do to to much discribing) . I also liked that you made gabriel seem more human.
Sorry this is so long i honestly did like this story , it just needs tweeking and i feel that someday ypu will come back to if and make if the best story out their -
Keep writing even being able to finish a story is a major acomplishment!
Anyway
Take care
Till bext time
Chase

Amazing!

Your write like Mojo Jojo speaks. PLEASE make your style more concise, it's painful to read the way you ramble on and on and on. It's as though English isn't your first language, in which case I apologize.

I simply loved it since the very beginning and I'm really glad that I came across with this FF. Thanks for the story and your effort! I'll stay tunned.