I liked how you delved into Naruto's early life as a orphaned outcast. His role as a surrogate brother to TenTen was a really touching and substantive alteration from Canon. Personally, I like the relationship that you have set up between Naruto and the rest of the Konoha Twelve. He seems like the bigger brother figure to the rest of the Genin.

Naruto's reaction to his parentage was realistic. I know I would be pissed if I found out that everyone, especially those I trusted, had been hiding evidence of my family from me for more than 15 years. No matter if it was for "good intentions." Thankfully, Tayuya seems to be helping ease some of Naruto's pain by spending time with him around the village.

For chapter 3, I enjoyed the interactions Naruto has with the close people in his life such as Kakashi, Teuchi and Ayame, and Team 7. I am glad that Kakashi decided to subtly reveal Naruto's heritage before he left with Jiraya on the 3-year trip. You had me liking Kakashi more than I ever did in Canon.

One thing I could never get over in Canon Naruto was the decision by all the higher-ups to not reveal Naruto's heritage to him. Such as decision should have provoked a backlash from him given that it shows that Konoha was manipulating him and not trusting him enough to reveal where he came from. They contributed to his isolation and sense of worthlessness.

Also, fine work with showing Tayuya's introspection. Her lonely and brutal upbringing made her into what she currently is at the moment. I look forward to seeing how her character develops from this point onward.

Overall, chapter 3 was good.

In this chapter, you fleshed out the interactions between Tayuya and Naruto in a way that makes clear why I find this pairing so captivating: they are almost like a reflection of Minato, the oftentimes serious but good-natured blonde and Kushina, the loud and outspoken redhead. This interaction, being seen through Jiraya's eyes, showed the other side of the Toad Sage that I feel is often neglected: the regretful old man haunted by his failures and mistakes but determined to do right by helping Naruto.

One trait of Canon Naruto that you seem to have retained in this story is his messianic desire to lead a village composed of people who have done unforgivable things to him as a child. But you have also balanced this trait out by making Naruto more serious as an person, based on his dialogue with Tayuya, capable of understanding people's emotions and fears. For the most part, I like this AU Naruto.

Overall, chapter 2 was good.

Good introduction. So you saved Tayuya from an untimely and painful death, courtesy of Jiraya. You also have Naruto actually convince Sasuke to come back to the village, hinting that Naruto might have a closer relationship with Sasuke in this AU then in the canon. I like the introspection that you give for Tayuya, you make her situation as Orochimaru's henchman (now former) understandable. I also like that you pointed out the continuity errors in the Naruto canon.

However, I noticed that you brought out the old trope of Naruto being physically tortured and abused as a child in Konoha, which I find to be impracticable. Naruto is not just another child in a village of thousands but the former son of a Hokage and war-hero as well the inheritor of a Founding Clan (the Uzumaki) as well as the holder of the most powerful Biju in the Shinobi world. Attacking Naruto as a child would be like physically assaulting a facility holding a nuclear bomb, its asking for trouble. It would also be a spit in the promise that the Third Hokage made to protect Naruto. I think that Naruto would probably have been isolated and ostracized from afar, which can be just as damaging on the psyche of a human-being more than just any physical scar. Take this criticism as just my honest opinion of the only thing I did not like in a otherwise good introduction to your story.

On to the next chapter!

Your story is certainly interesting and unique; I'll grant you that. I'll even admit to a certain fondness for parts, but on the whole it's garbage. A character's power and abilities were never constant. You just let whatever character you want win a fight because why not. Your solution to powering up a few characters was to overpower the enemies. I respect a fanfiction author's prerogative to change the story, but things should still make sense. This entire story is one Deus ex machina after another. You lost me completely when Naruto got captured; even my OCD and adhd combo couldn't save you there. What, they just didn't even look for his body? That's stupid. Any idiot confirms death, especially someone as hard to kill as Naruto. You just chose to go the garbage route and not have hinata or neji look for him, nor Jiraiya use sage mode to sense him. Regardless, even if Orochimaru survived that and could make another body it wouldn't have mattered. He would have certainly had chakra exhaustion not to mention been knocked unconscious. Naruto certainly would've recovered faster too. I'm still reeling about how having the full kyubu didn't make him infinitely more powerful. It should've made his chakra control better also now that he had the yin and yang. You just repeatedly chose to not write a good story so that you could write what you felt like. That is why I call this garbage.

Oh, and just to clarify before you sit comfortably with all of your faves and followers. Most parker on here I've noticed fave and follow anything long enough out completed either it's good or not. Most of then likely hit face or follow early on as well and simply didn't care enough to remove it from their lists once they decided they didn't like it. While I'd like to go in record saying I'm not trying to attack you personally, I'd like to repeat that your desperation to write an interesting story and inability to recognize our unwillingness to adhere to common sense in the universe your writing in makes the story trash.

I got as far as Naruto having scars because the villagers chased after him... nope! I'm guessing there will be a civilian council with a loud pink banshee and Danzo demanding he have Naruto

I understand that Naruto isn't happy that secrets are being kept from him but honestly everyone has secrets. I'm not sure how I feel about this chapter really. To me it just seems like a chapter for Naruto to act like a little brat. I'm enjoying the story, but I'm starting to feel a little conflicted.

This is my second time fully reading through this. God I love it.

great story I hope to read more Naruto X Tayuya stories from you in the future they are my number one favorite pairing who I thinks should have been cannon and I hope if these are among your favorite pairings I hope to see Naruto X Ino, Naruto X Samui, more Naruto X Yugito, Naruto X Temari and Naruto X Shizune stories from you

hehe, the blonde with big boobs is named boobs

Well, I dropped off about 10 chapters ago waiting for you to finish so I could binge the rest. May have waited slightly too long, but I can't say I didn't enjoy it.
It had a lot of creative elements to it and descriptive and emotive parts which really came across strongly.
Great story is all I can say.

I will never understand why so many people seems to like a bland and boring character like Yugito, she is literally the least interesting character of the whole manga. Even the fact she is a jinchuriki is boring since she comes from Kumo, a village that treats their jinchuriki fairly. There is a reason she was almost never seen in the manga, there is just nothing to tell about her, and fanfiction has not change my opinion of her, since the only personality writers gave her is : to be Naruto's girlfriend.

did Orochimaru just quote Yoda

Orochimaru had a horcrux? Horcruxes? should've add "Hari Potteru"

Imagine that you were in the army. Then you were tasked to kill your own family and girlfriend. That's how Itachi felt (20% of it)