Anakin is to affraid

great chapter

I love anidala stoyrs

Anakin is so much trouble

it is a interesting story

Surprisingly I really enjoyed this story. I wasn't sure how I felt about Anakin having another kid, but she towards the end she was included a whole lot, so that made it better. I loved how you wrote these characters like how they are in the movies and tv show. Also the intimate scenes, where WOW. Loved it. Super good story.

An enjoyable story. Thanks for posting it!

Thank you for finishing the story and not leaving it hanging!

Love the love scenes! Also I secretly
Hope Ellaena and Serena go away. Right
Now they’re a nuisance. I’ll be hated for saying this but there it gors. Doesn’t matter cause I’m hooked on the story and the romance. Thanks for posting! I’m trying to leave many reviews.

Much better chapter, this one. Anakin is still an unattractive mess but his tragedy is at least getting more justified.

Hello. I imagine this review is moot point, as there are 28 chapters. But still, here goes the constructive criticism that might come in handy in the future: narrative pace is steady, but as narration tells me Anakin’s thoughts with his every action, I find his lack of concern for Padme and everyone left behind disturbing. In fact, his detachment (as shown in the narrative) is not due to grief, or numbness even, but like a Blahness or even bumbleheadedness (if that’s a word). It really makes him unlikable in this situation and Padme’s reaction very lukewarm. Maybe it’s because I’ve been reading your later work before I found this one, but I’m this particular chapter you build up a great background story and set up a great scene with much potential yet the characters and their actions and dialogue fell flat. That said, I think you’re a good writer and will continue to read your stories. They are very enjoyable and I am grateful for the quality anidala fix.

the onyx addiction, the middle age swords, it just reminds me of Christensen’s Outcast movie. Not sure if that’s where you got the idea, but that’s what the whole thing reminds me of. Looking to be a very interesting story, thus far. I’ll keep reading

i can't deny that i wanted ellaena to just die already, at least given her current state it was very hard to like her. i honestly think it'd have been better if anakin had actually loved her, maybe not the same as padme but real love still, maybe even married on that planet. and that she'd simply died somehow before padme arrived or even during the invasion, which would've created more turmoil because then the empire would've not only tried to kill padme but actually managed to kill his new wife. more layers for anakin, though i guess he's already got enough angst but i still would've liked that relationship to be more real instead of the obvious 'baby mama' as you put it. (i DO think you can love 2 people at once although there will be one you'd ultimately choose if you had to)

You write action scenes really well; they're exciting and vivid and flow well. I liked Padme's iron will and courage, particularly when she faced her execution. Anakin was more difficult to relate to at the beginning, though he did improve after his captivity. The characters did come across vividly, though, even when I didn't find them appealing or relatable.

The initial premise was interesting, but the actual story was pretty weird. I had trouble following the scene and POV shifts sometimes, and the ending, especially the final chapter, felt a little rushed. There were also some loose ends (e.g. what happened to the other clones, did Anakin just stop having nightmares, what caused the nightmares in the first place, etc.). My opinion of this story is mixed: some things were quite good and some were not very satisfying, but I can see you have talent and potential.

Love the story there are not many if this story out there. That being said there were a few streches like or the code Aniken, but overall it was really good