Reviews for The Miraculous Adventure of Tessa and Lunala
Guest chapter 1 . 12/20/2019
Just read that you need plot ideas. I don't have main plot ideas, but I have little stresskiller random event whatchamacallits. I'm also on my phone right now, so I'll try to be brief. Expect errors!

Oliver and Hoopa prank Arceus. Seems like it's all fun and games, but the prank could be accidental foreshadowing for something (e.x. Oliver sets up an iPad and plays a gunshot, making Arceus fear a criminal broke in ; further in the plot, a deranged drunk maniac tries to shoot a main character. Hopefully missing his target.)

Christmas! Lunala, Tessa, Christian, and Arceus all work together to set up a surprise Christmas party for their friends. Not sure if any of the characters favor baking, but if there is someone like that, maybe they and their Legendary Pokemon can make peppermint brittle or gingerbread men.

Maybe try shipping some people harder over the holidays? We haven't heard much about older ships, like Annaleise or Tessa or Miror B (it's been a while since I reread the series entirely,.though I do intend on doing so, but on my phone I can't scroll upward and check some ships). I feel like some of these very old characters have been neglected in their ships, though they've practically been with us since the beginning.

Just some ideas! My thumbs hurt rn, so I might come back later with more ideas. , I hope this helps! :)
Chain chapter 20 . 11/17/2019
Hoo boy! This chapter was SO EPIC! I couldn't have possibly expected this!
I have SO MANY THINGS TO TALK ABOUT, and I am SO EXCITED, but I'll start with a decent intro.
It's 11:37 PM as I write this rn. I read this entire chapter almost in one sitting, with the exception of bringing my laptop downstairs (to watch my brother play Pokémon Sword :3) and bringing it back upstairs.
Now with that out of the way, where to start? While reading this, I decided to take a little index card and write down my favorite aspects. So for beginning, I'm so grateful you threw in that mini-recap near the beginning. It's been a while since I read this entire fanfiction (it's long), so I didn't remember it so well. That recap really helped, tysm!
And now for the part that literally had me smiling through the first half of the chapter, every time they appeared. Winter and Summer James! (My suggested OCs! :D) I love them so much, and you really outdid yourself with their personalities! It's just what I expected. I definitely didn't see Summer x Hop coming, but it was a welcome surprise. I'm definitely being biased when I say they're my favorite characters, eeeeee~
Next, those Pokémon puns were epic! I don't remember if you had them before, but "Onix-pected", "Mareepishly", "the apple doesn't fall far from the Victreebel", "peas in a Wimpod", and "Bye Bye Delibirdie" are so great. I never gave much thought to Pokémon-themed puns, and yours are hilarious!
There are actually a lot of references in this fanfiction that I don't know or understand, and not just in this chapter. However, the fact that the characters bring up real-life terms makes it feel like they're really alive, and the world of Pokémon does exist (it might, who's to say it doesn't?).
I also have a small theory. Yes, it's more likely for Victoria's Legendary Pokémon to be Eternatus, but Audrey's dreams/visions about a "dragon Pokémon" could possibly be Eternatus as well. Eternatus is a Poison/Dragon-Type, so it could certainly be possible. Or, in fact, perhaps Audrey could see Victoria with Eternatus in a vision, should Eternatus be Victoria's Pokémon and the Pokémon Audrey is seeing?
I also love it how the characters are supposed to be stopping an evil apocalypse, but find time to just chill out and have fun. I'm also happy for all those who found, ( cough cough ) some people ( cough cough ) in their life, and I feel bad for Victoria and LydiaLyric. The way you write really helps people attach to the characters.
Rowlet's sleepiness did make me laugh a little. Ngl.
(Here comes a tad of constructive criticism.)
For the "Normal POV", I'm definitely not complaining about the name, but if you wanted to keep the "'s" at the end, how about "Everyone's POV"? Also, "Third-Person POV" could work as well. However, this is such a minor detail that it doesn't matter at all, just a teensy suggestion to make.
It never, ever crossed Emilie's mind, over four years, to even remember her best friend? Yikes. But if her life really were that exciting, I guess it makes sense. But if she were fleeing Johto with her child, then why was Team Flare the antagonistic Team? Wouldn't Team Rocket make more sense? Team Flare is the evil team for Kalos, not Johto. Just thought I should add this.
(No more constructive criticism. I couldn't even think of anything else, because this was just so lovely, other than some grammatical issues and other things entirely opinional.)
Lastly, I've been sorta led to the conclusion that you're writing these songs yourself? I don't watch the Pokémon anime (though I should ;v;), but the way that Pokémon names are mentioned in the rhymes really got me thinking. Of course, it's possible that some of the previous songs were by other people (I live under a rock), but it just seems interesting to me, that's all.
All in all, I'm so happy I read this chapter when I did! It's so wonderful, and the characters are progressing perfectly (and the, coughcough new twins coughcough notbeingbiasednopenopenope). I look forward to seeing more writing from you, but take as much time as you need. The cliffhanger ending really has me intrigued. :)
VideoGamer13 chapter 1 . 6/26/2019
I've got some ideas for a team for Rebecca, since she should have more Pokémon than just Nihilego, if you continue with the story, that is. They are...

Lycanroc (Midday), Rock-type, Keen Ee for its Ability, holding a Lycanium Z
Accelerock, Stone Edge, Crunch, Giga Impact

Lurantis, Grass-type, Leaf Guard for its Ability, holding a Heat Rock
Solar Blade, Sunny Day, Swords Dance, Leech Life

Weavile, Dark/Ice-type, Pressure for its Anility, holding a Razor Claw
Night Slash, Ice Punch, X-Scissor, Aerial Ace

Espeon, Psychic-type, Synchronize for its Ability, holding a Psychium Z
Psychic, Shadow Ball, Dazzling Gleam, Hyper Beam

And finally...

Togekiss, Fairy/Flying-type, Serene Grace for its Ability, holding a Chesto Berry (regenerates)
Rest, Dazzling Gleam, Metronome, Air Slash

And of course whatever Nihilego knows.
Chain chapter 18 . 3/14/2019
Remake of my little character make thing below.

Winter James, 12, twin brother of Summer James. Good sense of logic; when he knows there isn't any sort of life-threatening craziness happening or whatnot, he'll be a little mischievous, competing with Oliver and Hoopa, but not often. He also is serious when he knows he should be. His Partner Pokémon is either Meltan or Melmetal, who is extremely serious and literally takes no nonsense. I'll call 'em "M" because I don't feel like said Meltan/Melmetal.

(This is all me making stuff up as I go.) So M got in big trouble with Arceus and they're still pretty rude to each other. M is the only one who will defy Arceus and will get away with it (sometimes). M also has kind of a bad vocabulary. Male or female I don't know, I honestly think it would be likely if it were male.

If you actually decided to start using these characters, don't bother with this, it's just me making things up like two months after my original post.
mary.okeeffe.16 chapter 19 . 2/28/2019
Wow, Moana and Kiki keep getting better
Chain chapter 18 . 1/25/2019
Whoops, I think I'm spamming. OK, this is the last one.

With release of Pokémon: Let's Go, Eevee! and Let's Go, Pikachu!, Meltan and Melmetal was added as a Mythical Pokémon. I'm sure you are aware, but Pokémon like Shaymin and Darkrai are NOT Legendary Pokémon, they are Mythical. I'm not asking you to change anything, just warning you. There are some diehard Pokémon fans that will drill you for calling Zeraora a Legend or such.

With a new Pokémon comes a new character. I don't have an actual account, and I don't know how to do voting poles, so here is my character. (Note: if you don't use it I might pop it in one of my own things. .p.)

Winter James, male, platinum blond, very short hair. Pokémon: you decide. Naturally, Legendary is EITHER Meltan or Melmetal. Decent childhood. Often teased, as his sister's name is Summer James. Called the Season-Kid. Serious at good times, though mischievous and is a prankster (watch out, Hoopa. You have competition.)

Melmetal/Meltan personality: much like Winter. Really, you decide anything else. I hope you see this.

I love your fanfictions. I remember, when I read this about a year ago, I thought it was weird because it "gave Tessa all the credit," and stopped reading about halfway through the second chapter or something. Now I understand: Tessa was the first character introduced, and the Squad leader. I can't wait for Chapter 20. Feel free to change anything about Winter, Summer, or Melmetal/Meltan if you want. Reading your fanfictions inspire me to write my own. I've started a new fanfic that, as I'm writing this review, is at Chapter 10. Maybe I'll publish it to here someday! But that's about me.

Happy writing!
Chain
Chain chapter 1 . 1/25/2019
I CANNOT wait for Chapter 20. Lorelei is my favorite Elite Four member and I love the character you gave her and Olivia.
Chain chapter 19 . 1/25/2019
Holy OOF, PLEASE make another chapter!
VideoGamer13 chapter 18 . 10/13/2017
I have a couple of signature Z-Moves for Legendary Pokémon. And here they are!

Mewtwo-Mewtium Z upgrades its signature move Psystrike to the Z-Move Psychic Mind Swap. It swaps all stat changes between Mewtwo and its opponent.

Azelf-Azelfium Z upgrades Uproar to the Z-Move Supersonic Psychic Screech. It deals double damage to any Pokémon with Soundproof for its Ability, negating it.

Manaphy-Manaphium Z upgrades Heart Swap to the Z-Move Operetta of the Mind and Soul. This move will deal damage while at the same time dealing the normal effects of Heart Swap. And finally (on an unrelated note...)

I have an interesting idea for a crossover that could happen. What if...the DCFDTL (if you know who those are) were Pokémon Trainers?!

Dun dun DUUUUUN!
ScarletArmory1 chapter 18 . 8/25/2017
I loved the chapter! All I can say is fuck math!
SkyGamer chapter 17 . 8/13/2017
Things are getting interesting in this story.

I Wonder what's taking so long for the new chapter to be released?

I'll looking forward to new chapter as it was.
Guest 2.0 chapter 1 . 6/8/2017
Hey, I'm sorry I haven't reviewed in so long. I really enjoyed chapter 17 and didn't get to review it.

I've heard about UM&US. I can't wait five months for this. I wish I had a time machine.

You're starting up the Drabbles again? Sweet.

I have some prompts for you. Most of them are AUs and some are story compliant. I hope you like them and find some inspiration from them.

Marshadow & Lillie - Marshadow had never seen Lillie's eyes light up so much at the sight of a book.

Anderson/Tessa - The sun was setting over the sleeping duo, and they wouldn’t have had it any other way.

Hooper & Oliver - "You’re my best friend, of course I’m gonna do something dumb with you."

Latias & Annaleise & Lightning & Shifter - Being protective of one another.

Seth/Yumi - 'How could I not have realised? I love you.'

Lydia & Lyric - The two of them couldn’t look at each other anymore, without bursting into a fit of giggles which got a stern glare shot their way because they're being too loud in the library.

Kukui/Lillie - Kukui took hold of Lillies's hand, giving it a small, reassuring squeeze.

Eric & Kyurem - “Who gave you that black eye?” Human!Overprotective!Kyurem

Anderson/Tessa - “I’m pregnant.” "WHAT?!" "Hahaha, I'm just kidding, you nutball. You should see your face right now." (Bonus: Anderson is the one who says 'I'm pregnant.')

Lycan & Palkia - Lycan sings loudly along with various songs regardless of talent, and Palkia groans in dismay and turns the radio up louder. Human!Palkia

Alexander & Zekrom - It’s Zekrom's roommate’s birthday and Alexander just made her drop the last cake in the store. "So help me either find a new one or bake a new one." Human!Zekrom

Elijah & Groudon - "I just spilled a cup of coffee on you by accident so please take my jacket and I’m sorry." Human!Groudon

Blake & Rayquaza - 'Rayquaza opened his cardoor and didn’t see Blake riding by on her bike and she crashed into it. "Holy crap, sorry!" Human!Rayquaza

Birhan & Kyogre - Birhan keeps getting water on his face and can’t figure out how. Kyogre is shooting a squirt gun at Birhan from outside the window when he looks away. Human!Kyogre

Brianna & Tapu Koko - "I swear my little sister pegged you with that water balloon, not me." Human!Tapu Koko and Human!Tapu Fini

Lydia & Articuno - "I got called into work. I’m sweaty and my shower broke, can I use yours?" Human!Articuno

Allison & Carter - Carter wants to watch It’s a Wonderful Life before bed on Christmas Eve and Allison insists on A Christmas Story. (Bonus: They watch both. Allison cries through most of it and Carter teases.)

Melody & Magearna - Melody thinks the top of the Christmas tree needs a star, Magearna wants an angel at the top. (Bonus: They find a way to put both of them up there.)

Anderson & Meloetta, Anderson/Tessa and Tessa & Lunala - Anderson grew up opening gifts on Christmas eve and Meloetta grew up opening them Christmas day and they both want to do their way. (Bonus: Tessa and Lunala sneaks into the gifts and the food while Anderson and Meloetta are arguing.) Human!Meloetta and Human!Lunala

Seth & Shaymin - Shaymin puts up holiday decorations weeks or months ahead of time, and Seth tries to put everything back away until the holiday is closer.

Hunter & Genesect - Hunter and Genesect are roommates and they're sharing beds because Hunter's bed had mysteriously caught on fire and he doesn't have anywhere else to sleep. (Bonus: Hunter sleeps with his limbs hanging off the bed, and Genesect hides under the blankets with all of his limbs pulled in close.) Human!Genesect

Kukui/Lillie - Set in Pokémon The Series: Sun and Moon. Kukui stops to greet all the Pokémon they pass, and Lillie walks faster, so the Pokémon don’t “get” her. (Bonus: A Popplio jumps on her head and she runs in circles, screaming. Kukui is trying to calm her down while trying not to laugh.)

Nolan & Darkrai - Nolan watches scary/suspenseful movies, and Darkrai tries to scare him during the movie.

Elias & Heatran - “Quit asking how I got stuck up here and just catch me.” Human!Heatran

Anderson/Tessa & Annaleise - Annaleise is a Marvel fan and Anderson is a DC fan, Tessa doesn’t care either way and always mixes them up.

Kiawe/Lydia - Lydia bumped into Kiawe’s car and thinks he is really injured when he is just
really infatuated by Lydia and asks for a date to make them even.

Lyric & Landorus - Landorus stole a car and halfway down the road, Lyric wakes up in the backseat. Human!Landorus

Azelf & Derek - Azelf stole Derek’s camera, but after looking at the pictures, he feels bad and
decides to track Derek down to give it back. Human!Azelf

Natalie & Necrozma - "If I could eat cotton candy for every meal, I would."

Miror B & Kaelynne - "The sound of your chewing makes me want to throw this pot at your head."

Isaac & Zapdos - "Why join a dance competition when we can create our own?" Human!Zapdos

Alyssa/Falkner - "Whenever I walk through the park, I see you play guitar to young children, old couples, angsty teens and you're really cute-wait, are you-! You're singing to a Glameow in a tree. "Please take my money!...and have my number, so we can go on a first date!"

Annaleise/Birhan - Annaleise lost a bet with Tessa, so now she have to confess to Birhan about how she feels about him in under a week. She intentionally calls him when he's asleep, so he won't answer. Everything was fine until he answers her call. She panics and just blurts her feelings and then hangs up. (Bonus: Birhan just lays in bed with a confused look on his face before smiling and wakes up a sleeping Kyogre who congratulates him and tells him to go back to sleep.)

Jerco & Solgaleo - "What do you mean, 'I'm banned from Sinnoh'? What did you do ?" Human!Solgaleo

Evan & Reshiram - Evan calls the wrong number, who turns out to be Reshiram. "You've got the wrong number but you seem upset. Want to talk it out?" Human!Reshiram

Michael & Latios - 'When we stopped at the red light, we were both blasting the same song.' (Bonus: Song is Should I Stay or Should I Go by The Clash.) Human!Latios

Robin & Jirachi - "Does my mail really accidentally get sent to your house this often or are you just taking advantage of my magazine subscriptions because when you bring it by, the corners of a few pages of my gossip magazine are always folded." Human!Jirachi

Christian/Arceus - “I have been driving for the last 5 hours and all I want is beef jerky, so GET YOUR HAND OFF THE LAST PACKAGE ON THE SHELF. YOU MAY BE A HANDSOME STRANGER, BUT NO ONE IS STANDING IN BETWEEN ME AND THAT SALTY SNACK!” Human!Arceus

Maggie & Mew - Maggie just caught Mew cleaning up some graffiti on their apartment building and congratulated her on being an awesome person and decided to help her clean but little did Maggie know, Mew was only cleaning it so she could have a blank canvas. Human!Mew

Yushuv & Ho-Oh - Yushuv's roommate ate all of his microwaved mac’n’cheese and Ho-Oh heard his frustrated curses from across the hall. Human!Ho-Oh

Anderson & Meloetta - "Oh so you want to play your music as loudly as possible? Well, two can play at that game."

Pre Miror B/Kaelynne- “What is your problem?” “The simple answer? You. The long answer? Everything you do. Well, I guess they were both simple answers. Hah, look at that.”

Jasmine & Virizion - Jasmine always wears sunglasses, so Virizion has never seen her eyes. Finally, Jasmine takes off their glasses and Virizion is so flustered and shocked that she just stares into Jasmine’s eyes for the rest of the day.

Peter & Tornadus - “Would you STOP coming in through the WINDOWS, it scares the hell out of me every TIME!” Human!Tornadus

Alyssa & Mesprit - “Listen, we have very thin walls and I heard you crying in the shower, are you okay?” Human!Mesprit

Liam & Entei - “If you set the alarm off in the middle of the night ONE MORE TIME, I SWEAR I WI-wait, why were you even cooking at 3 am?” Human!Entei

Lunick & Mewtwo - “You locked yourself out too?” Human!Mewtwo

Meghan & Deoxys - “I don’t mean to sound paranoid but I’m pretty sure you’re a serial killer.” Human!Deoxys

Eric & Kyurem - “Eric, don't deny it. You bake when you’re stressed and sometimes you give me cookies, but recently you’re giving me whole baskets each day, now I’m not complaining but are you okay?”

Tessa & Lunala - Tessa has to do Lunala's make up because she doesn’t own any, and..."wow, your hands are soft.” Human!Lunala

Kiawe & Lydia - Lydia stubbed her toe during a dress rehearsal and fell off the stage and directly into a stranger's lap.

Anderson/Tessa- They're in the 1950s. Anderson and Tessa own a diner and they get into ridiculous fights about the dumbest things and end up kissing at the end.

This is all I got for now. I'll brainstorm more later.

See you definitely next time!
ScarletArmory1 chapter 17 . 4/13/2017
Holy shit! There was alot of action and romance! I especially loved how the trainers are deeply connected with the legendary Pokemon!
WeS RoYaL chapter 16 . 2/27/2017
Nice long chapter. I kind of find it 'weird' to imagine Kiawe singing lol, but I like it!
Haha, Seth talks! And Shaymin is a girl? Didn't see that coming.
Anyways, I've always thought of Kiawe being jealous of Ash, even in the anime, even though the issue hasn't TRULY been explored...yet.

One question though, and it may be a noobish one:
Where can I find polls? I've NEVER been able to see one here on Fanfiction.

~WeS RoYaL~

BTW I DID read this chapter when it was first posted, I just didn't review it at the time.
Guest 2.0 chapter 1 . 2/19/2017
Didn't even notice there was another poll. Haha. And I kind of get why Christian got five votes because Arceus is his legendary and using Z-Moves with him would be very powerful and I think the readers would like to see that in action.

Okay, who should bless Christian with a Z-Ring? Hmmm...out of all of the Kahunas in the game, I really like Nanu the best because he's really mysterious and he did help the protagonist with the Ultra Beasts.

So, I'm going with Nanu.

I'm ready for the next chapter and to see what happens. :)
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