I've read this story many a time, and I believe it is one of the best CatCF fics EVER. It deserves a special place both on the internet and in my heart. Great job!

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Wow! This was a really great story. A lot better than I thought. PS I rther like the idea of veruca changing and then verucacharlie. Do write a sequel!

This was amazing, I loved how did you explored the factory and all the rooms, using all the 5 childs and their interactions were great like they were best friends like it should be, and you manage to keep all of them in character.

This was great, added to favorites

Hey, great job with this story! This was the first story I've read on FF, since I'm a huge CatCF fan myself. I found this story by searching for Charlie X Veruca, because I ship them together. Keep up the good work, Matt! (I'm assuming that's your name; haven't looked at your profile yet.)

Can you do one where he fails to save her

Even though you will never read this this story was OK I guess. 5/10. Not trying to be rude. The chapter felt a bit the same as the last. "We need to find a key, no wasting time, it's not here." Sorry.

Sorry, I meant THREE not THERE. XP

Wow! What a story! This is the first story I read on this website. Can't wait for the sequel. I think I have an idea for the sequel!
I think the sequel should take place there months after the story. Cause I don't like stories where their teens or adults. And maybe wonka goes away for a few days and he trusts the kids to keep an eye on the factory to make sure nothing goes wrong!

I noticed that you combined parts from each of the naughty children's demise songs and put them together. Very clever. I will continue to review every time Next in line is updated. You are very great when it comes to this.

This is a great story, I like the ending, you are such a great writer, keep it up with Next in line!

What a wonderful story. You must be very talented, since you did such a great job with writing about the kids' adventures as they explored the factory. I can't wait to read your other stories! By the way, my username is a reference to the movie "Passengers". :)

Hey, I loved reading your story! I loved the mixture of friendship, romance, anger, and courage (and lack thereof!) among the children, and how their task of finding the key extended the tour, and they got to see so many different candies being made, not to mention that the ending was delightfully shocking! Great job!

Congrats on finishing the story! I really enjoyed reading it! I'd like to see a story about Fickelgruber, Prodnose, and Slugworth sneaking into Mr. Wonka's factory ten years after the 2005 movie (so not a sequel to this story), and they could try stealing some secret new candy recipes!

It's good seeing the joy of the family members as their children finally make it back to them. Especially Grandpa Joe! His reaction is great.

The way Mr Wonka tests Charlie by suggesting that the others go home, after the whole challenge of the factory was about teamwork is great - it backs up one of the main themes of this story, and cements that in the conclusion. You make me wonder what the result of Charlie not passing that test would be though. It makes for an intriguing end to the story.

Thank you for putting in the work to finish this story.