Aside from a few pacing issues, i'm quite liking this story so far. Hope to see more of it!

A good chapter but you need to work on your proof reading.

Show, don't tell, dude. Author's notes belong at the beginning and end of a chapter, not in the middle. Also, proofread a bit. Certain paragraphs are repeated.

Amatsukaze, we need more Ship girls.

very good so far but you may want to slow the pacing down a bit so we readers don't get confused.

For my character Suggestion:

Shipgirl

Name: USS Santee CVE-29

Personality: Calmly Cheerful and always ready to lend a helping hand, but always keeps one eye on the sky do to a sever dislike of Kamikazes. Santee also enjoys games like hide and seek.

Physical Characteristics: Stands about 5'4" tall with a decent figure and large bust. black hair in a short ponytail and dark brown eye's. typically wears a mid-tigh length, sleeveless sweater dress in Measure 30 design 20A color scheme with a wide black leather belt around her waist, thick black tights and red feminine boots that reach to mid-calf.

Armament: when rigged for battle Santee's belt converts into a leather partial bodices with two miniature gun buckets hanging off the back with a miniature 5"/38 DP mounted in each. Santee's Fight Deck is now a shield attached to her upper left arm and she launch's her aircraft with a small, one handed crossbow (it looks like the Skyrim crossbow), the quiver for the aircraft bolts hangs for her right hip.

Ship specifications:

weight: 6,534 tons

Length: 559 ft

Beam: 75 ft waterline, 114 ft flight deck

Draft: 32 ft

Speed: 18 knots

Compliment: up to 1080 O and M

Ship's Armaments:

2x 5"/38 DP cannons

4x2 40mm Bofors guns

12 20mm cannons

Air Group:

20 F4F/FM 2 Wildcats

12 TBF Avengers/ SBD Dauntless Divebombers