Alright, that's plain too fast. At least give them a week or a month of contact before they have a crush on each other or something.

I think a great funny moment would be an awkward moment between the Group and Silica, who just knew Riwet would do something like this, and is a little upset about him not telling her.

Hello there,

It took me a while to finish reading this, but I'm glad I did. I hope you continue with this story. Do you plan to do the GGO ark or Fatal Bullet game if you get around to it? Though I guess you could do both.

Best of luck, and I look forward to the next chapter.

Been following this story for a while but I finally wanted to say that I have immensely enjoyed this story. Riwet has been a pleasure of an OC to read about. Well done.

When I saw that there was a new chapter I immediately went to the story just thinking “hell yes”. Then when I hit the end insert the stereotypical “Noooooooooo” scene

Thanks for the update

Dude this is awesome and I love Riwet he's great I have no real problems with this fic just kind of hope you make the Fairy dance arc better than canon it was easily the weakest arc everything about it was terrible especially making Asuna a useless damsel in distress it sucked that they did that to such a badass character

Alright lets get this review started because its going to be a long one for me.
I started reading this fan-fiction a few months ago and got sidetracked from reading it about half way in. I honestly liked how you write and how you progress the story. I came back to it again a few days ago and decided to catch up on it and see where you had taken the story and I'm glad I did. You somehow keep my attention and make me let out a laugh every so often with your jokes. The direction you are taking this story in is marvelous and i cant wait to read more.
Keep up the awesome work!

It still feels like you're making the mobs to overpowered. I've played the games, watched the anime and read the manga. Nothing suggests that level of difficulty. Don't oversell it. It only makes the fights feel like they drag. Not to mention lo level mobs can't handle sword skills nor can they block them. Lastly, parry is a separate skill with no cool down or movement impairment. Some sword skills have a cancel effect but it's not the same.

Petty decent so far. A bit too much exposition for my taste. Also, the fight with that kobold seemed suuuper drawn out.

Well took a couple days but read this from start to finish now the waiting game starts lol. I really like your story especially since it has other characters perspectives and isnt only the Oc/Si character. Fairy dance is going to be interesting i wonder if sugu and kirito will know who eachother are from the start since he said he was going to tell his family. Does kazuto know that riwet saved asuna in this with the revival item? Also wonder if your going to keep with the cannon of the first raid on the tree fails or not since you changed up heathcliffs fight a bit. Wonder when riwett and kirito will meet up maybe at the one town in the corridor where kirito becomes gleam eyes to wreck shop

What happens if you log out before the lock in? Does it work or is it a specific time?

Overall, very nice story. I just think that the Hollow Fragment section was a bit too long, wordwise.

Best chapter :D

...So is it just me, or does Riwet have some crazy fortitude? I mean, the guy’s managed to shrug off, hold back, or overcome a lot of things that others have or would have had a lot more trouble with. Admin Paralysis, that mind scrambling thing in that research facility, his pain when fighting those LC members and the subsequent “dying” state, even (on a more humorous note) alcohol. I like it, honestly, nowhere near as overpowered as Kirito’s dual wielding, among other things, but definitely a really useful characteristic that can go a long way in certain situations. I don’t know if it was intentional or not on the author’s part, but I encourage him to keep it. Keeps things interesting, and more believable than some crazy buff or ability that others may go for.