Good story, but seems strange for an animal sorcerer to have an animal farmiliar.

It is certainly interesting to see Redwall and DND mix - just like a blend of Coke and Fanta. Unconventional, yes, but refreshing if mixed well.

I like your writings of a hard magic system in the Redwall world - I did the same behind a medieval political veneer in Southsward and its surrounding lands - but sometimes it would be interesting to see what would happen when hard magic returns to Mossflower proper.

You did a good job in sculpting the world. Magic changes everything, and the lives of both woodlanders (if you don’t want to just call them ‘goodbeasts’ all the time, just use ‘woodlanders’) and vermin. The main character being a woodlander being thought as vermin does add a second dynamic to the struggle.

That said, you seem to put too much action in your chapters. Some time for them to rest helps with the pacing, and character development as well. It would also serve the purpose of building tension up.

All in all, it is a good read, and one does not simply ignore your work a especially when hard magic is involved. May your heart be your guiding key!

I like to see the group encounter a pack of dark elves and wulvers, the dark elves has dark grey skin, wear bone like armor, four insect wings on their back they armed with spears that shoot out energy beams, and wulvers resemble wolves but they are taller, with red and grey fur, along with a mohawk, their body are covered by bone like spikes, they don't carry weapons because they are weapons, they have three bone like blades that literally comes out of their wrist and the vixen calls them SAVAGES

Uh oh

Bro I'm so excited! I'm happy that your still updating.

you should ship Hastings with a rat girl

please continue

THANK YOU for fixing the formatting, now I can actualy read it withoutt getting a headache (dk if I spelled that right)

Okay, first of all, holy shat, I cant read this. And second of all, what the hell kind of formating is this?

So this really needs to be fixed, I checked ahead to other chapters and they arn't any better. What you should do to fix this is put it in normal pharagraph format, then whan a new pharagraph begins or a speaker is done speaking, press enter.

I'm not going to bother about the format, other people in the review probly went over that.
Anyways, I realy like the idea od a woodlander being mistaken for a 'vermin'

Dude, you need to update, this is awesome!

Seriously, dude, you need to fix your formatting. No one is going to bother to read through this if it makes their eyes hurt doing so.

Was really intrigued by this, but the format of the writing is throwing me off and makes it uncomfortable to read. Even with it being double spaced it is too blocky.

Why do you insist on writing like this?