It seems kinda strange how Jack is first like "I want to make them pay", then goes back in time (which was extremely vague and came out of nowhere) and is suddenly like "I want to be friends with them" and then back to "I want to make them pay". Also 'crave' and 'want' are basically the same thing, making Jack's character even more conflicted. This story has no consistency and the entire time I keep thinkingWait, why is this happening?" Everything just comes out of nowhere and as sudden as it begins that's how it ends. Though I'd still prefer it if you could please continue.

ohh jack

Jack's motivations seemed to become muddled once he goes backs into time. The indecision in a way counters his earlier anger at Bunny and the Guardians, I would think he would still be high on that emotion. Not thinking if it was right or not. But anyway, I really would like a continuation of this... though I believe in happy endings...

OMG! I love your story! Your writing is great, you give great details in your writing wich I personally love! Please continue! Can't wait to find out what happens next!