I have to say, I expected more. Who was the child in the beginning, and the Japanese man? It didn't make sense.
Also, Holly didn't really act like Holly.
I liked the fanfic it was a detailed version of a scene mentioned briefly in the books.
You are a good writer with a bit of randomness, so keep it up!
PS I was hoping Artemis would be in it, though I do understand that he is an extremely complicated and unpredictable character, so I'm not fully blaming you.
I personally think you're up for the task.
Keep doing you,
Ginby Flobberworm

Anyway. A comedy author like you is a breath of fresh air. In fact, if you are willing I would like to do a colaboration piece of you are interested. Get back to me at
(That name came from a mental breakdown)
Anyway cheers. Also. The light side may have cookies. But the dark side has ice cream.
Quoted by an old man, and a guy with an obnoxious bowler hat. Ciao

I like vegemite, can you swim?

Roses are red
Boats have anchors
Crunchy nut cornflakes
Are just frosties for wankers.

Now. With the more inane side of me finished their rant, I would like to say congrats. Great story so far and I'm looking forward to reading more. I myself am a budding fanfiction author who tends to focus on the darker side of stuff, so a good comedy author like yourself is a breath of fre-PANCAKES!- sorry

What I thought was an adventure story is now a crack fic... God bless ye all

I just realized Human Ivory are our teeth.

Oh wait. This is actually closer to the work of Kitty0706.

Jesus Christ, were you inspired by Rubberfruit or something?

Me:toobolken(did i spell that right?) obviusly has a brain stuck to his squid.
Bob: 0.o (no more suger for you)
Me:NO! SSSSSUUUUUUUGGGGGGEEEEERRRRR !
Bob:-.-*fishy facepalm*

...ya, i suck at this. but you dont! go you!

you will always be funny. just keep writeing about the netherworld fiamengo.

im laughing so hard right now! anyway i wuold love to be in your stories! belladonna edgly,sprite, at your service!
i have green eyes black floor length hair( always gets in the way of my wings -.-) uhhhm...thats about it! email me at for a yay/nay.

WOOOOOOOOOOHOOOOOOOOO!
GO SUGAR AND HYPERNESS!
have you ever tryed ginger ale and orange juice? its goooooood: )

OH MY GODS YES MORE OF NETHERWORLD FLAMINGO AND BOB! I ALMOST DIED LAUGHING!

quote from bob: OMG, WHAT IS THAT? SHOULD I WORSHIP IT?
please,i beg of you, blueshroom

wait... your a squid too? awesome! im black with green polka dots.
meep meep meep, blueshroom

where can i find this mistical "flamingo"?
no seriously, i would fit right in there...i certanly dont fit in here.

keep going, blueshroomAKAcharlottemclean

What happened to Bob? Does he starve, or does Mel save him? And does Holly get used as a mop or what? Where's Trouble? And who the hell just kidnapped Arty?

Why is Juliet into slash LOTR fanfics? Since when does Opal Koboi know the Silmarillion? Who is this random Takaban-birdy-dude? And what's Kitsune got to do with any of this?

Pls answer.