Eh with her really? Not a fan

Considering it has taken you almost 4 years to write 90k words... I'm calling your reboot abandoned within 6 months. Good luck

Love the story so far

You shouldn't have to change your story because of some critical readers. If they don't like it, then they can just stop reading it. I see nothing wrong with it.

What the fuck is this shit you should just fucking kill off the prince retard no plot development as expected of a retard that can’t think for yourself should just delete this story I feel bad for you you do not have a brain and if you did it must be painful to listen to you come up with this garbage

Just found this story and I’m already a big fan. I’m sure with the reboot it will be even better. Can’t wait.

What a fucking shame my experience with this reboots are two one that they never happen because the author finds out they lost their interest in the story and just let it die and second because their lack of interest in the story they just completely change it to the point its no longer the same, i really liked the story the only problem was silas was to good, dont get me wrong there its nothing wrong with that but all the shit he was put though it would be more realistic if he was a little more grey. I loved doreah please dont change that and well my experience say r.i.p this good story hope you prove me wrong

This is an interesting story, I think it's good and I look forward to the reboot.

Hey mate, do what you gotta to make this story how you want it. The few changes I'd like to see in a reboot is to take out Doreah all together. Like I've said in my past reviews I feel like she ads nothing and just slows things down. I know your plan was to have a love triangle thing but that could be done with Silas, Daenerys and Daario and would feel more natural.

Plus you did kinda contradicted yourself when you said that you didn't want Daenerys and Silas to get together after only knowing each other for a a short time like in other fanfics. But Silas and Doreah went from a hello on the ship to talking about love to bathing together and sharing a bed in like what felt like a week. Instead you could use that time to develop Silas and Daenerys relationship. Plus I do have to side with hugp1x in his review about sexual trauma.

Personality wise I could see Silas more like Hugh Jackmans Wolverine. Both have suffered physical and mental trauma leaving them cold to most except the people close to them. And having that Baratheon blood their tempers would match pretty well.

I think The Red Stag could fit better for a title. Being a gladiator would mean getting bloody a lot so he'd earn it the same way Dalton Greyjoy earned his. And so Silas could have a personal sigil of s red stag on a black field. Stannis, Renly and Joffery have personal stag sigils so why not Silas, and it would show his commitment to house Targaryen.

Daenerys and Silas could also merge them like Joffery did with the Stag and Lion. And I think Silas in custom made black armor with a red stag on the front would look awesome.

Anyway sorry for dragging on.

Can't wait for more. Love Blair

So like Silas is dead? “full force of his war hammer to the chest...”. Maybe it’s a nitpick but Silas isn’t wearing ANY armor (a pauldron only covers a single shoulder so he might as well be naked against a warhammer and 5 other experienced killers) so his whole ass chest is crushed by a 10-12lb hunk of steel being swung by a character about the size of the Mountain. The fact that he gets up again is ridiculous, having Lyseo just kick him would have worked just as well from a narrative standpoint. It’s unnecessary and very immersion breaking.

If you want to convey bad feelings or antipathy towards sex due to trauma, it's probably better to stonewall people than actively pine for them but not do the deed. It doesn't read well when you have a foot in either isle, so to speak. Why entertain the thought of a romantic relationship but then not be interested in arguably the most important part.

Oddly, I never thought Silas to be 'perfect,' but rather unrealistic. From memory (it's been a while), there was nowhere near enough bitterness, resentment, anger, rage etc. These aren't even negative traits, but completely understandable ones that were lacking giving his circumstances.

My other prevailing thought was that I remember Doreah being a bit of a nothingburger of a character. She kind of came out of nowhere and practically forced the relationship on him. It came off as annoying. Given his situation, I'd push romance way further down the line.

Your story has potential but your grammar needs work mostly its verbs you seem to have problems with but there are a few other small things

You should watch Spartacus TV show before you write anything about a gladiator it'll probably give you so many ideas especially with Spartacus and gannicus.

That sounds good, I was personally rooting for more of the SilasxMargaery story. Yeah, the perfect OC happens quite a bit in these fics but I didn’t think it was super present here like in say “A Song of Manes and Antlers” which I still love but it randomly had his OC all of a sudden thinking about Robert’s Rebellion and the tower of joy. I don’t think Silas’ medical condition is needed and it stretches the logic a bit too far I think.

Its a pitty you wont be updating this story for some time, but if you feel the need to do this then I can't wait until it's completely rebooted, as I'm sure it'll be great.