like your story hopeor you continue it one day

nooooooooooooo yo queria seguir leyendo, como la vas a terminar ahi. tan emocionante que estaba, estaba increible justito aqui se corta la historia, que mala suerte

me encanta la historia

me encanta tu historia

si naruto x ty lee

Hold up what? He didn't think ninja could do justu without handsigns? What is the Rasengan? Shizune released a giant purple poison cloud without handsigns. The rasenshuriken is an elemental jutsu that dosen't use handsigns. Also, you're making Naruto out to be a massive idiot, which isn't true. The Second Hokage and Kurama both said that he was vastly intelligent when it came to certain things. Sorry man, but this feels like Naruto isn't actually Naruto, but a caricature of his bad qualities.

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Hagaromo took back his yang seal so naruto can't use the asura six paths biju sage mode

I'm begging you to continue this cuz I'm hooked and I'm sad its ending so soon

Please make more!

Dude this story is awesome keep it up I can't wait for the next chapter to be out

gosh damnit lemme try again.

1. Don't put sighs in dialogueSigh, this sucks."), instead make it an action, because that's what it is and not a sound (Naruto sighed. "This sucks.")

2. A lot of the stuff doesn't make a sense. Naruto knows stuff he shouldn't, and there's no way he'd summon thousands of clones in just three hours. I'd only expect a hundred at most.

3. Capitalize the first letters of nouns. Names are nouns. So it should be Shadow Clone Jutsu, not shadow clone jutsu.

4. There's also punctuation errors with dialogue/thoughts.

"Use a comma when its not followed up by action," said Roland.

"But a period when there is." Roland paced about the room. "And then theres action with a, that's me!" said Adrienne, waving her hand in the air.

There are quite a few faults with the writing.

1. Don't put sighs in dialogueSigh, this sucks.")

Chapter 9, ANY DAY NOW! :

Not bad. I wish he did not have jutsu any more. Does anyone know of a story where Naruto ends up in the Avatarverse without ckakra but because of kurama he can bend all four elements like the Avatar. Preferably a reincarnation story or at least de aged.