Here take a flame, get flamed

BIRDIE NOOOO!

oi what sins ophis is innocent! Ophis is Love, Ophis is Life!

So Lilith has a modified boosted gear

Great fanfic, please update soon

Your grammar has improved a lot since the first chapter...keep it up..

Interesting! I look forward to seeing how Remnant handles Ophis & co. in their world.

its so horrible I can actually feel headaches when reading it...

while you have good ideas...your grammar i s horrible...

Awesome story, I hope to see more soon, when's the next chapter going up? Huh, so the way it was worded that Lilith possesses a quarter of Ophis's power. Does that mean if their is ever a need then Ophir will be able to retrieve that power? I doubt she'd have no way of reclaiming it short of Lilith dying.

Okay, the idea is great and so is your execution. The issue is, to truly make your fic flourish, you need a beta to come through and make all your chapters excellent.

I appreciate your imagination and work ethic to be able to write this despite not being a native speaker of English (your profile states Indonesia), but have you thought about getting a beta to help correct your grammar issues?

Good job ophis

Yeah yang way to jinx it

Can't Ophis' "semblance" alow her to destroy anything? Should she not be able to chanel her "semblance" through her chain gun and obliterate the grimm. This has got me stumped and confused. I understand she is hiding, but when the cameras were destroyed when they first encountered the Ant-Lion; could she not erase them then? Other than that, I hope to see more updater soon.