Interesting, my dear Author, interesting :D

its so perfectly made author-sensei *sobs* i love it!

BY ALL THAT IS HOLY! That was hot! Really hot—as in molten lava hot! If it's cold af for you, read this, and you will be warmed up in no time! Bro, thanks for writing another one of these!

I read both this one and "Dream", and they were really good. Your grammar is, overall, pretty good as well although there were some errors. These stories remind me of a set of "Free" doujinshi with one in which there were two Harus and another with two Makotos. However, they differ compared to your fanfics in that the two versions of the characters are separated forms of the original's personality.

If you're curious, they are called "Ryoute ni Haru" and " Zenmon no Shachi, Koumon no Shachi."