As someone who loves your writing and stories, I wish you’d update this one more often. This has gottta be my favorite outta the three, but it’s been almost a year now man. I really hope you update this again if not I understand.

Freed & Lint Sellzen would be a textbook example of a set of Monozygotic Twins, if not for two things. First is the fact that they do not share the same gender, which is an extremely rare situation with Monozygotic Twins. The second is that they are the result of what might best be termed the “Demon Sword Project”, an attempt to create a “True Descendant of Sigurd”, which considering how they went about it, seems pointless. In effect, you end up with a large number of what Fate/Stay Night would recognize as Homunculi (aka magical clones).

Kiba would not have been a name mentioned in documents pertaining to the Holy Sword Project, as he went by the name of Isaiah back then.

Would I be right in assuming Vali looks like Jalter from FGO?

Who exactly did Issei meet in the surveillance room? You didn’t actually say.

At this point, I understood that this story was written by a 15 year old virgin kid. This is way immature(from my perspective) to read. Newcomers to fanfic world may like it but those who have been in these fandoms for ages will NOT like this story in any way.

Just how in the name of the Flying Spaghetti Monster did Sirzechs manage to keep training Issei a secret from Grayfia-chan?

There is of course an easy solution… simply phone Michael and ask for him to give Asia permission to pray again. That alone would devastate Riser’s entire team.

Issei should technically be immune to fire by now.

There’s this thing called a ‘Thesaurus’ that can help you to avoid using virtually identical words more than once in the same sentence, and thereby avoid annoying the grammar police.

Why does Asia think in Japanese? She’s Italian I think, so she should think in Italian… on that note, does Italian have an equivalent to the Japanese honorifics system? I know English sort of does, but not one that is anywhere near as elaborate…

Wait, did Raynare take Asia all the way back to the other church or something?

The Riser Arc is in for some drastic changes...

Add Lint Sellzen from the manga to Issei’s harem

Who the heck is this Reeve person, and what does he have to do with the Hyoudou residence?

In what way does Tannin resemble an apple?

the problem with this story and the reason why it doesn't have 2000 reviews its the fact that you completely destroyed issei lifespan for no reason.
literally trillions of years wasted with no cure and you expect all the readers to kjust accept it and put it out of their minds? well, that clearly didn't happen as most people read that part of the story and noped the fuck out, for good reason.

stray devils normally are weaker than strong low class devils.
Valis divine dividing made the strays power divide, so his power should be of 5 (6/4) wings.
Issei should have been able to destroy the devil with 20x boosted gear, as you stated it has the power to wound a 8 winged devil.

Your story seems forced to progress it's just one wall after another to bust through honestly it sucks to read it has a great plot but the story telling needs a lot of work

10 floors? Okay Now I see why 3 floors would be considered modest :P

Why did Azazel have the labs placed on a floor that would see him being buried under four floors worth of rubble if one of his experiments decided to explode in a particularly spectacular manner?

I grew up in New England, where homes built with three stories and multiple guest suites were incredibly common, but such homes were almost always someone’s vacation house, and had been built in such a way as to be aesthetically pleasing. As such, I tend to have a hard time conceptualizing such a structure as anything less than luxurious.

The name “Ddraig” is Welsh, which is a very consonant heavy language when compared to something like English, so it is actually understandable that you are misspelling the name, even if it is an easily avoided mistake.

Did you gender flip Albion too? Because if you did, I can think of a very good reason why Albion and Ddraig would be fighting, and it has nothing to do with grudges, and everything to do with Albion protecting her eggs D

Between the fact that you had Reiko admit she can’t die from natural causes, and you have Issei in close proximity to his parents while they are suffering from whatever this ‘disease’ actually is, I have to assume that they are being poisoned, and that Azazel is simply being obtuse.

Interesting start.