It was all right I guess.

Oh my God, this story was so rich. Great words! I'm hooked!

I can just see Chaotzu attempting to whack Tien. The poor guy - he'd shock nearly everyone if he actually did do something like that. And Rose learning how to control her ki, it sounds like Gohan trying to teach Videl. Good chapter - it seems like it's picking up pace. Keep up the good writing.

Beach? You get a beach? That isn't fair...

But I'm glad you've got Internet access again. I was wondering when you'd update. You've got an original idea, it seems, and I like original ideas. I can't make too many comments on this chapter, other than how much I enjoyed reading it. It'll be fun to see how Tien and Rose get to the point where they're not at each other's throats.

Still as good as ever. It's wonderful, reading a story that the writer has actually put some effort into. What a welcome change from what's generally out there. Have fun typing up your next chapter!

*laughs* So you're stuck doing research papers too, huh? They are so time-consuming...

Okay. Back to the fic. My guess as to what happened with Rose is that Gero did something to someone she was very close to, and she wants to undo the damage. I'm probably very far off the mark with that, but that doesn't change the fact that your chapter was very good. More Androids. Hm...

Hope you can update after you get your Internet connection back.

Great chapter, as always, though I definitely sympathize with you. No Internet is going to suck. But hey, don't rush the fic because of it. Keep its pace, and definitely do not take out too much of your time for it. We can all wait. I'll be looking forward to reading the next chapter!

Grouchy guy. Uppity new girl. A usual dynaimc. But at least our girl (Rose, is it?) isn't all-knowing.

Y'know, on a fanfic forum me and some others were discussing how characters are handled in a story. Specifically, how they got screen-time and how/when characters were added to a story. Among other suggestions were that characters should only be brought together once they become relevant/have a reason to join the cast. ...And lo and behold... Bravo. We'll see if you handle Bulm'a personality as well as you have Tien's.

'Til later.

Finally, someone told Roshi off!

Hmm, I think there's a good quote for this chapter: "By the pricking of my thumbs, something wicked this way comes." (Ray Bradbury). The unknown evil is alive and well and living in the wild.

Well, then, we'll all just have to wait and see what it is, now won't we? I like it.

The Dragonball fell into the ocean. Hmm... My foreshadow-sense is tingling...

Tien, untrusting? No... But that would make him _different_ from all the other characters! That's characterization. We can't have that for non-Saiyans in a DBZ fic. HAven't you read your DBZ writer's guide?

Broken laboratory... Forgotten Android? Genetically enginiered girl?

Very nice. Love the characterization on Tien and Chouzu. Don't like it on Roshi and OOlong, but that's becuase you got it right and I just don't like those guys. I'll keep an eye on this. 'Til later.

The Dende-era Dragonballs can grant two wishes.

Spelling, check... Gramar, check... Basic formatting and presentation, check... Thank you, ever so much.

Nice intro. Really makes the story seem more cosmic in scale. Like our boys are just bit players about to be thrust into fight with fate itself... And its got Tien in the lead. Oh yeah...

Cool. There are so few Tien stories out there that it's always a pleasure to read a new one. I love the way you write - you pay attention to details, and that's really good. Keep up the good work!

Um, o k. Interesting. Keep going.

A Tenshinhan fic! O.O! Okay, I think I will refrain from saying *ANYTHING* remotely bad about this because the originality involved in doing a Tenshinhan fic earns you a full set points all on it's own!

Please write more! This is quite interesting!