I've got some complaints about the story.

For one thing, the entire story was incredibly rushed. New things are added in, but no time is given to digest them before you move over to something else. The characters don't have time to emotionally adjust to the changes, but at some point have their emotions suddenly switch. Chara was just manipulative of the monsters; suddenly, at some point they cared about them. The tension between Chara and Frisk was never resolved, and the issues Frisk had with being close to them were glossed over. Asriel and Frisk are scared of Chara after they kill their father, but suddenly they get over it without any conversation with them.

Alphys appears to learn more about humans, but nothing happens from that. Chara's magic practice is observed in secret, but nothing comes from it. They meet the skeletons, but nothing comes of it (particularly surprising with Sans). Frisk's heritage is discovered, but other than using it as an excuse to make them their heir, nothing is really done with it.

Finally, death by buttercups is very slow and agonizing. At the rate you describe Asriel deteriorating, he'd be a mound of dust before Chara got close to dying. And Chara doesn't really have the connection to golden flowers in this story to make their choice of suicide method have any real reason to it.

Sorry, but this whole chapter felt horribly rushed.

Although I do admitt that I was hoping the distance between Frisk and "C" would have shrunk a bit by now.

Hey.

I don't have an account, so I can't PM you. User SirAuruda1st has plagiarized some of your work. Auruda has copied some parts from chapter 2 of your story "Black to Blue", and pasted them into his story "Undertale: Kyochi's Experience". I've got proof.

This is the original text hat you wrote:

My child...please...go to your room."

It's not fair! Humans get to live up top with everything and monsters are trapped down here with nothing! I wanna be the one to help you! I wanna be the one to save you!

Many words were misspelled, but the message shone through clearly. Toriel felt almost...hopeful.

"You remind me of someone I once knew," she mumbled, cupping Frisk's face in her hands. "Come with me."

This is how he altered it:

My child... please... go to your room."

"Stop calling me that! I'm not some little kid! I know how to take of myself! It's just not fair! Us humans live up on top with everything they have and monsters are trapped down here with nothing they probably have left! I know you don't want me to leave, and I wish to stay here with you, but what true monster would it make me if I'd leave you all down below the surface and act like you never existed?! I wanna be the one to help your kind! I wanna be the one to save you all!"" Max finally shouted his true thoughts out.

Toriel was surprised by his words. She felt almost... hopeful. Never did she ever meet a human, let alone a young male like him, with much courage and determination.

Max realized what he did to Toriel, and wanted to deeply apologize for screaming. But he was cut off by her.

"You remind me of someone I once knew." She mumbled, cupping Max's face in her hands. He was confused by what she said. "Come with me."

Pretty suspicious, ain't it? Just wanted to let you know.

Well, it sucks Chara died, but they did it for someone who needed saving. I read the entire story, and I enjoyed it. Love the plot, character development, and the history behind it, I just...wow.

I just realized that the whole fight between Chara and their father (who is a freakin' bastard!), along with his comments of Chara being a reincarnation of the queen of old sounds alot like Jupiter Ascending to me. If you seen the movie, then you'll know what I'm talking about.

This.. was the amazing. I actually have tears in my eyes, to be honest. I really loved this story..!

Ok... let my tear... but gosh

It will be hard for Frisk...

They didn't know how to rule a kingdom...
And mostly someone will do politic at this time

Like, Frisk and Asriel are ploting to take the throne together by faking prince Asriel sickness
And cause Asriel became to strong most people will get to scared of the family

That Fear can bred another war, and yet they also some loyalty that are won't get satisfied with what happen to the kingdom

The civilian will be able to take it nicely
Even though monster are weird, as long they are nice it will be Ok
But still... argh... i think too much

Thanks for spending your time to write beautifull story
Hope peace be with them

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I DON'T KNOW WHAT TO SAY.

oh my god I am super exicted cannot wait to see what is going to happen next !

This is so intense! Battles in stories always amp my adrenaline up!

Yeah, I did!

I noticed!
Then again, I just found this

AW SNAP! THIS IS SO EXCITING AND INTENSE!

this is going to be so cool !

This is going to be AWESOME!