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Great fanfiction so far, the chapters are a bit too short though, other than that keep up the great work.

Okay. Look. I maybe reviewing from chapter one but I've read all of your story. Its an interesting idea...buuuuut, it needs work. You need to edit it for one. Another thing I also particularly didn't like about this story is just the overall voice of the charcters. Its choppy and boring as well as predictable. You need to refine your work a bit. Its good for a beginning writer but the way you get better is by asking the questions like "what am I doing wrong here?" or "does this dialongue sound good?" A little bit of self doubt never hurt any good writer.

Just saying...make it longer. I know it's more work but it's easier to get lost in a beautiful fictional world that way. Its more appealing I guess is the right wording.

Good job. Now, while I respect that your the author and you will make the story the way you want to, Please consider sticking with PercyxPiper and not changing it to Pertemis. We have way to many PercyxArtemis and barely any PercyxPiper. Thanks and great job

Piper and Percy will not break up by choice, but by fate.

GReat story so far. Can't wait for more. And Percy/Piper, finally yes! It's my absolute favorite pairing and I'm always excited when a new story appears. Great job, keep up the great work! Also, I'm the description it says PercyxPiper but eventual PercyxArtemis. So does that mean Percy and Piper is gonna break up, cause if so, please don't make that happen. We have to many PercyxArtemis. But it is up to you. And I will continue to enjoy the story regardless of the pairing