Reviews for Marianna Black and the Ring of Power |
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Guest chapter 5 . 3/28 J'ai trouvé l'histoire mais c'est UnburntKhaleesi qui l'a réécrit. |
Spacman chapter 5 . 1/15/2018 Why are you removing the story? Could you at least leave the authors note chapter. |
Eaglebucky chapter 5 . 1/14/2018 its XenaHime53 |
UnburntKhaleesi chapter 5 . 1/14/2018 It's XenaHime53. Not 'Zenahime53'. :) |
inabellclo chapter 4 . 11/21/2017 update this is super duper interesting |
djmegamouth chapter 2 . 3/27/2017 I'm interested. Seems like a bit much money doesn't it. |
Guest chapter 4 . 8/23/2016 Good start to this story. |
Guest chapter 2 . 8/23/2016 I'm assuming she dispises Harry for getting g her dad killed? |
Guest chapter 1 . 8/23/2016 No offense, but I do not think Sirius would of named his daughter Marianna. |
Smiling cat from down under chapter 4 . 7/13/2016 Love it please update soon this is amazing and I can't wait to see what happens next. |
kitcat12 chapter 2 . 7/4/2016 Hi there, In chater three, I don't think that Aragorn would tell her about the ring of power, I think that they would be more suspicious of her, seeing she is from another realm and all, I think that Sam was right to be suspicious. You also switch from past tense to present tense at times, which throws me off a bit. Here is an example. Past tense: Sharptooth continued speaking. "I tell you this information because of how it will affect the Black family vault. As I understand, your father, Sirius Black, fell through the Veil during a duel some years ago. It is entirely possible that your father is still alive." Marianna gaped at Sharptooth. She didn't know what to say to this revelation. Her father, alive, but trapped in another world. Present tense: Marianna is understandably shocked that she has so much, but Sharptooth calmly explains that quite a lot of the items in the vault were bought by members of the Black Family centuries ago, and that the Goblins value everything at the price it would be worth to cell today. After realizing this, Marianna has another question. She asks "why did you call me Lady Black?" Sharptooth explains that the Blacks are one of the 5 ancient Wizarding families who founded the Ministry of Magic. The other 4 are: the Potters, the Peverell's who became the Potter's, the Bones, and the Malfoy's. One more thing. You didn't have to repeat the letter from Sirius's letter from chapter one. It is a good story, but it needs some revision. I wish you luck on it however:p. |
Guest chapter 4 . 6/25/2016 This is really good |
ThatCrazyLion chapter 4 . 6/23/2016 :3 |
ischyros chapter 3 . 6/21/2016 i very much enjoy this story and hope for so much more. |
Artur Hawkwing1 chapter 3 . 6/19/2016 And so it begins. I take it the gringos, currency exchange pouch works across world's to? |