I like this story. It's not a mess, I like the way you describe the emotions of the different characters.
The angst raises all the story, and the end is hopeful
well written

Extremely well written. I like how you had the team gather to help/comfort Deeks. I would like to see a sequel or a second chapter that would deal with Deeks recovery and how the case they were working on resolved itself.

This story and God called in today are my favorite stories ever by anyone. They are so well thought out and written. The reader can picture them in their minds and you have the characters down so well. I hope you continue writing the NCIS LA (Deeks) and the Supernatural ones. They are the best. Thanks.

Great emotional. The characters are truly represented. I sure would like another chapter to know if Deeks is alright and so are you

ah this story is so good! Have you thought about doing another chapter? Or a sequel? Like kind of the when deeks wakes up or something. Either way this story was still awesome! You capture the characters so well, I didn't want it to end!

This was very well-written. Thank you. I enjoyed it.

I was curious why you chose the title you did.

I could feel the emotion, the pain and confusion, so deeply from the characters. This was extremely well done. I look forward to reading more from you.

This is such a powerful story - it seems to come from a place of absolute truth and reality. This also makes it unsettling. The most truthful thing is that there is no neat ending, no miraculous recovery, no easy answers, with everything resolved by the 59 minute mark with a bit of humorous banter.

Like the best short stories we are left to "finish" the story ourselves - well done and please keep on writing for this fandom because you are one of my favourite writers

Wow... I don't think this was jumbled, or in any way incomprehensible. Like, at all. On the contrary, I think this was a marvelous story. I really liked how you organized it, with all five of them having their say. It could've easily gotten confusing, but you handled it masterly. There's this overhanging feeling of helplessness, fear, and frustration at everything and everyone, because shit sometimes happens without reason and there's nothing you can do about it, no matter how desperate you are. It's all very poignant. I especially enjoyed how you worked in Sam's little girl there in the beginning. I'm sorry that you had to go through a rough patch. Sometimes, life just genuinely sucks. At the same time, I'm glad you posted this: both because I think we're plenty of readers who enjoyed it, and because, hopefully, it gave you something as well.

Thank you for sharing this story with us!

All the best,
Linguam

This is so good. I think the point of whump is emotion and adrenaline rather than working out plot lines. It's a different kind of reading and writing. The way you revealed what happened was more intense than just telling the story as it happened. Great job!

Wow, that certainly is a powerful and emotional piece of writing. Thank you for sharing and I hope you are now in a better place yourself.
It certainly is true that when strong emotions effect you, it can be easier to write to try and flesh out those feelings...

WOW!...Just wow... Thank you for this extremely emotional sad story..Keep doing what your doing..Because what your doing is amazing...

Thank you it was a good story.

i'm sorry you went through such bad times... i hope you're doing better now
i'm glad you kept the story as such - it's a pretty acurate description of what happens when your world falls apart around you with no warning