I love how you fill this with refrences.

this is so messed up and i freaking love it!

Ok... You're a really good writer and don't take this personally but... I lost interest with so many love interests and stuff like that. Again you're an amazing writer the love part is what's getting me to quit

I’ve finally finished binge reading the story. Happy to see everyone got a true happy ending, definitely one of the best Undertale fics.

You beautiful, wonderous writing beast. You've made the best Undertale story I have come across. I thank you for this glorious gift.
...That being said, with nouns/adjectives that start with O, I, A, E, or U have 'an' placed before them, not 'a'.
Examples;
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"If you think he survived that fall, you're an idiot."
"We're gonna need an undertaker."
"An eccentric one, with weird tendencies!"
"One with an amazing coffin for our fallen friend!"
"Well, we all agree he shouldn't be an oaf."
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Honestly though, I hardly even noticed the 'a' thing, the story and writing was just too damn good!
10/10. Will read again.

I vote for either Lynsins or Synn!

thank you sweet merciful -snapfuck/

1) love the name ;)
2) Loving the fic! Cant wait to finish to read all of it!

Oh poor Lyn. Your antics entertain me so.

I was not expecting this chapter at all, I've never seen a interaction with papyrus go this way before. I loved it (trying to write a good, articulate comment but cant because im literally speechless).

This was so fluffy and cute at first an' i was like ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh *ded*. Then, it got slowly more serious and mature (at the bar), and even though i was expecting it, the flowey conversation got my heart pounding.
It was absolutely amazing, in all the other stories i read, the readers just ignore flowey and never really take him as a serious danger until later in the story (they know he's around but during the bar scene they do nothing about it).
The way lynsie acted in this was a new experience for me and i felt like running with her to go save papyrus.

Might want to tone down the childish- extreme personalities are allowed in fiction but she's just a kid now with the way she's acting.
Also the way she talks is unnatural- it switches between a overly formal tone to emotional to emotionless ( "Ouch mama. You've hurt me. You've hurt your child" - what?!) - it doesn't fit her supposed personality at all.
Also Lynsie, you're totally leaving her - stop lying.

It annoys me when the oc characters ends up calling Toriel mom so soon after meeting her- I mean really, sure she's nice, but you'd think they'd go through more to become parent and child- you wouldn't do it to any other nice monster or human so why toriel. Also there's other relationships too- don't just default to mom.
I hate it even more when adults do it, I don't care if you're a kid at heart (or some other bullshit) have some sense and maturity - think of stranger danger, the situation you're in, your life that you've built on the surface, the fact that someday, somehow you're going to leave (or you could die there), read relationships and how they work 101, etc. - it's simple logic.

Also author I apologize if this offends you - I don't mean it against you directly ( TOO MANY stories go like this) I just had to put my opinion somewhere (I guess it built up and unfortunately it decided to come up on your story).

I like how this story is going and I can already tell what kind of person Lynsie is and what she's doing so far fits her personality and beliefs. I can see how it can be easier to trust monsters more if you dont really like/trust your species that much and you already heard of and liked monsters (also lynsie seems to be a stubborn enough person that she applies extreme measures based on her beliefs- don't like humans: isolate yourself as much as possible; like monsters- connect with as much as possible).

Best undertale story ever

Hoo-boy. This took forever to read. Thanks for writing this story and giving me something to help de-stress during finals week.

While your story was entertaining, there were some elements that I didn’t particularly enjoy.

1. Grammar. Something that can be easily fixed. Many writers seem to forget about spell check before publishing their works, but I usually give those authors a pass if they manage to at least get their ideas across. While there were many small spelling mistakes in your story, it didn’t bother me as much as the other aspects I didn’t like.

2. Age. So… Our Hero is said to be in her late 20s, but is known to be a child at heart. Okay, that’s a great start. But, as I continued to read your story, I realized that Lynsie is just a child. Not a “child at heart”, but actually a child. The decisions she makes, the way she acts around individuals, the constrained black-and-white view she has on humanity and life in general… It really makes me want to scream, “Act your age!”. Perhaps it may be because you, the author, is still trying to grow up and learn what it means to be an “adult”, and I cannot fault you for that since you don’t have the experience. But, please set the age to one where it is believable and parallels her personality. At age 28, Lynsie should already be mentally mature enough to understand that leading men on is a HUGE no, no, no, and that KISSING someone on the LIPS means MUCH MORE than a simple “””friendship”””.

3. Formatting. I noticed that you are a fan of implementing music into your chapters, and I have no problem with that. However, it becomes a problem when the lyrics become almost a quarter of your chapters. Music is great for letting the reader know the tone of the situation, and I think you know that. But, there have been MANY instances where when the minute I saw more song lyrics, I skipped the entire section. I didn’t bother to read any of it because-in all brutal honesty-I was tired of reading them. Once or twice is fine, but every consecutive chapter? No. To me, basing off an entire scenario on song lyrics is lazy writing. Just think: why would we, the readers, read through an entire song when we can just look them up/listen to it ourselves? It seems as if you are using music as a crutch, and that is something that always disappoints me because I see a good story get ruined through overuse of lyrics. Try describing the scenario you want us to see by using your own words. Utilize the five senses and your adjectives! has always been my friend. :)

Those are mainly the bad things. There are other things I want to say, but I just wanted to get the main points through.

With bad comes the good! Here are the things that I loved about your story!

1. Originality. Despite the fact that you did use song lyrics from other artists, you DID create something that I haven’t seen before. I enjoyed reading your story despite the faults. It’s like a breath of fresh air when you wrote something that wasn’t almost like a carbon-copy of many other works! That made me very happy, so thank you! :)

3. Completion. You actually finished your story! That in itself is INCREDIBLY AMAZING! You don’t know how many stories are left unfinished or abandoned by their authors, but you didn’t! It takes a certain amount of determination (haha) to complete a story, and you were able to beat the odds!

If you read all of this, thank you! I wish you luck on your future endeavors. :)