Awww. I love it. Can’t wait for the next chapter.

Update?

Oh please oh please update soon I can't wait to read more xx

I can't wait to see that you do with this but if I may sagest you put some space in between your paragraphs it will make it easer to read

This story is sooo cute I can't wait to see what happens to Luna and mori
Please update soon

Honestly this story has a ton of potential, and I'd love to edit the chapters for you if you'd let me. The extra long paragraphs make it hard on the eyes to read(not in a omfg i hate this story way-in a way that the words will jumble together and will cause me to have to track the story with my mouse) This is not, by any means, meant to cause you pain. The story thus far is awesome, I'd love to help you get more readers. You have a talent for plot and I am sincerely hoping you'll get back to me about editing soon!

I would love love love love to allow you to write comfortably while I take care of polishing up your work. You, my dear, are a diamond in the rough. I want to see you shine.

Here's a little tip for you when some one started to talk make a new paragraph it's then easier to read that way. I'm not trying to be mean or anything so please don't think that!

Great chapter!*insert words of encouragement here*

More please!

Yo!Your story is coming along nicely so far!But even though your vocabulary is good and your grammar is average,I just can't help but notice that your spelling can do better...Not saying that it's too horrible,it just needs improvement!Your plot is also an eye-catcher..And while it's still early,I suggest you thinking about your own story twists so that your character can grow more because if you just follow the anime/manga then it tends to get quite boring..Spaces are important too because if your story looks like a hacker's code then it's hard to read...Those are the only advice that I can give you for now...Until then!

Nice chapter btw..

Also, if you'd like a beta for this story let me know, I will gladly help you out :)

KittenBlue here! I just wanted to contact you before anything else. :3 kittenbluelotusstudios dot coooom~ XD you can contact me there, let me know which story of yours is your favorite you've written to date I'll write honest critique and post a blog with a link to your page :)

Thats what i usually try to do! Thats why I'm taking so long to update. And u're story is awesome so far!

More please!

Nice job so far Lonlystone, I hope to see the next chapter soon
I think its nice that you took a different approach to how the girls were found out, with Blade being found out before Haruhi, unlike many of the other fanfics. I also like the story because Blade reminds me a little bit of myself (not the back story, but how she acts)
Keep at it!

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