Omg yeees an update

Been following this story for quite a while, since ITAL, and I want to let you know how great of a job you're doing. It's so captivating, you do a great job with the character development, and I do empathize with Emi. I haven't been through anything like she's been through, but you do such a great job explaining and describing it that I can feel what she was feeling in that very moment!

This story is such a joy to read and I can't wait for the last few chapters to be posted. Great job, keep it up!

This is an incredible rollercoaster ride of a read, with Evangelion levels of effed-up-ness. Entertaining, fast-paced, and shamelessly melodramatic. Cell seems pretty in-character for the most part, and Emi is both hilarious, sympathetic, and irredeemably disgraceful, all at the same time. I laughed so hard when Cell raged and blew up Mars after one of their screwed-up spats. This is so complexly bizzare, twists involved, I have to congratulate you. Your writing has a strong pull, keep up the good work.

Well...I never can say I ever read the fist version... but I am most certainly loving this one!

I'd melt too.

What?! You can’t just leave us on a cliff hanger like that! Arghhhh it’s your story, but still.. D:
I thoroughly enjoyed this chapter! Please update soon! You’ve seriously been improving so I’ve finally favorited the story now.
Update soon. PLEASE-
-JustSaiyan123

Its just got a little dark...i love it! I've been waiting a while to read another chapter, this story is very interesting.

So much easier to read! I’m sure your readers will be very thankful that you’ve made this alteration.
Amazing chapter as always! I do hope the next one isn’t as dark as I think it is..
Still, I look forward to it!
-JustSaiyan123

I hope you’ll be expecting critique.. so here it is.

Make sure to avoid word walls; they make it increasingly more difficult for readers to read your story.

Here’s a tip: make each moment a character speaks a paragraph of its own.

For example.

“Hello,” Person 1 greets. “How do you do?”

“I’m fine, thanks for asking,” Person 2 replies.

They are both separate. Do not conjoin them. It will confuse readers and they will have to reread and that is somewhat irritating. (Please note: you do not have to make it present tense only because of the example, it’s just like that. Make it past or present if you want, alright? It’s your story.)

Yes, this story is an improvement but that one thing I pointed out seriously needs work on. Please fix it.. ;

I’ve followed the story for now, but I will favorite in the future once I see how it goes. (Cell needs more love from the fandom, god dammit!)

Anyway, it’s really going good so far, keep it up!

-JustSaiyan123

You know...this story is sooooo much better well done this build up is perfect I'm sure cell would agree. Heh I can't wait to what else you got for us.

You going to make more?

Please write more I want to see what happens next do good

It looks like an interesting story.
Keep it up, I am looking forward to reading the next chapters ;)
(#Cell is awesome ;D Love him)

Hello, I'm back and I see you've left a few remarks of your own. You know, I was definitely in the wrong with such harsh critique so it's great to see you've risen above it and are trying again with a rewrite. I actually do like what you've done this time and have started off on a good note, with good grammar, dialogue and characterization. Keep up the good work and I'll try and be more in-depth with reviews in future. Hope you had a good Christmas.

this history is cool