| Reviews for When I die young |
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Moleluv chapter 1 . 6/21 This made me cry so much. |
Winged Seer Wolf chapter 1 . 3/31/2019 It reminds of thesong 'If I die young'by The Band Perry. Nightcore has their own version of it. |
Gemabean chapter 2 . 1/16/2019 Okay, this made me cry and I’m actually dying right now, but would Sirius really be that cross with Remus? I think a big part of why I’m crying is imagining Remus showing up the next morning to find the healers taking out two bodies. They tell him Harry died the night before and Sirius committed suicide soon after. I imagine the look on Remus’ face as he realizes once again that he is alone. That everything he ever held dear was gone, gone for good this time. I imagine him soundlessly sitting down in a chair in the waiting room, his eyes haunted and full of sadness that cannot possibility be expressed. The healers exchange a look and chose to leave him be. Remus sits there unmoving as thoughts race through his head. He is wondering if he was ever so foolish as to believe he could have friends? A family? If he was so foolish to believe he could be normal. Silent tears roll down his face, but there is no one left to lean on. No one to comfort him. I imagine him contemplating— not for the first time— if it would be better to follow them. I imagine the potters and Sirius playing at the beach, blissfully unaware of the pain their friend is going through. Aware that he is sitting on the guilt of his best friend and nephew’s deaths. At some point sirius’ mind wanders to him, but he can’t bring himself to care. Remus sits there for hours, all day, until he is reported and escorted home. He is given a warning about loitering, only because he is a werewolf. Remus sits in a corner of his shabby, rundown house, not sleeping, not eating, going slowly insane due to grief. The week goes on. Dumbledore and Andromeda has both arranged funerals, but Remus had been forgotten. He did not attend. Remus didn’t even bother looking outside or keeping track of the days. His eyes are red and swollen from unending tears. When the full moon eventually rises, he finds the pain a relief. A distraction. Throughout the night he tears himself apart. He mutilates himself because Moony feels his pain too but doesn’t understand. The moon sets and Remus lies on the ground of his home, naked and bloodied. By this point the four in heaven have noticed him. They had watched him tear himself apart. They watch as the minutes tick by. Remus’ jagged breath becomes weaker and weaker until he eventually bleeds out. His face forever etched into a look of unending sadness. His eyes staring blankly, clouded by pain. His body forever bloodied and mutated by his own hand. They watch his life drift towards them. Upwards. Only to be stopped and dragged down. Someone had remembered him. Dumbledore was at his side with Pomfrey and others. Saving Remus. So Remus never even got to join his friends. Remus’ life becomes a whirlwind of pain and sorrow. As he grows older he falls in love and has a son. But his life is forever plagued by the guilt and sorrow of his friends death. This is the storyline that is playing over and over in my mind. Remus is my child, and I am crying so hard. |
Moon-Princess-Serena1993 chapter 1 . 9/24/2018 It’s fine my heart was useless anyway |
Guest chapter 1 . 8/20/2018 That's okay I didn't need my heart anyway |
Tlyna52 chapter 1 . 3/8/2018 Very, very tragic and yet beautiful at the same time. I was near crying through most of it but the ending was perfect. Loved this. |
Guest chapter 1 . 10/6/2017 This story is heart-breaking, but it's amazing. I just reread it and I was in tears throughout it, sobbing by the end. I think it's actually a really believable show of what might have happened. I think Sirius was perfect here. The problem is that there are some weird subject-verb inversions that shouldn't be there and if I'm not mistaken a couple of wrong verb tenses. Apart from that, the plot is great and the story is well worth a read. Keep writing! x |
Marauder007 chapter 1 . 8/26/2017 It was absolutely beautiful and heartbreaking. I seriously cry every time I read this. |
BCgurlie chapter 1 . 8/10/2017 Very sad, made me cry. I kinda think Remus will be joining them sooner rather than later too. Sirius' death will probably hit him really hard. |
Guest chapter 1 . 6/13/2017 i didn't get the last sentence. |
aailaiqbal04 chapter 1 . 4/29/2017 I cried so hard that was the best |
Willow Lark chapter 1 . 2/24/2017 This is so amazing and so sad. Its beautifully written. I rarely cry over fanfics, but this made me sob. Great work. |
Nocturnal Storyteller chapter 1 . 1/9/2017 I reread this all the time. It's depressing and I love it. |
DreamingInShadows chapter 1 . 11/18/2016 Beautifully written and well thought out: I actually cried reading this. I love the scene of the family together in Neverland swimming. Keep writing |
TranquilTevine chapter 1 . 9/20/2016 The feels were strong with this one,it was the neverland line that got the waterworks starting :P I'm glad he's with Harry though I can't help but feel horrible for Remus :( |