Some points...

Try putting different speakers on different lines
The 'evil queen' is called Panthia, not Pandora
And names need Capital Letters

Other than that, where's the rest?

Why you don't continue ?

Cool! Well maybe in the next chapter, Mia & Mo kiss after they rescue her?

finish it and make mia and mo kiss

This is quite interesting. It's a shame there aren't many Mia and Me fanfictions, so I support this all the way. I like how the story shows us what the unicorns are saying withought Mia having to translate it. It's an experience that the episodes can't give us. The story surely has potentional; I just hope it won't become too dark. Don't get me wrong, I think Mia and Me has a story that could be presented to an older audience that it's targeted for, but too much violence wouldn't fit with the show's spirit either way. Anyhow, I hope you'll keep writing, you've done a great job so far. I look forward to the next chapter.

Please update soon please!

Please write more I want to find out what happened to Mia

Please write more! I need to know if Yuko Mo and Onchao make it in time to save Mia or if she uses her bracelet to get away! What if her charm in the bracelet brakes while she is in Centopia! She will be stuck there until she can fix it! Please I am begging you to write more!

Please update this

Keep writing it

please write more

I want to find out what happens

What will happen to Mia? Can she escape with her magic? Will she have to stay there until everything goes well?

Plz make more chapters

Please update!3.