Zane vs Jack was a fight I never knew I needed until I read it. Also, I'm really impressed with how the story is progressing. The first several chapters were a little rocky, but the story has finally hit its stride, and it is intense. I do hope you still plan on continuing this. I'm hooked now.

Aww man I miss the Infinity

Good job keep it up

Blah, since the Ceaser Initiative chapter you've chased down what I think is an entirely unnecessary plotline that significantly distracts from the main story you've got going. I mean, did the Halo universe really need a new insurgent/terrorist group pissing in everyone's cheerios?

I am a bit biased since I just generally detest the shadowy plots as a whole. You had something good but you've diluted the whole dimensional travel and contact between two universes with a tom clancey novel.

Best of luck you ya

Seriously, isn't the post-reaper Citadel space plight enough drama for a story? Why did you have to put some pseudo shadowy sub plot?

Lame.

While I like how your story is told, and it is an interesting take on things, you have very strange numbers in chapter 5. The canon ME population is at its highest point (which is at the time Eden Prime is attacked for the first time) between 85 billion people. Even with 50 billion or so geth programs added in to this before the Reaper war starts since they aren't counted in that numer, considering how in this story the reaper ships caused WMD explosions in the megaton levels when they got killed, there shouldn't be much more then 25% of the original population left alive. This means that the leftover population in total is at most 33.75 billion people. How did you come at 49 billion survivors?

Gotta agree with some of the people when they say Liara had not right to apprehend someone. And I highly doubt the UNSC would just let them take someone that has important info on them

Um it doesn't look like you thought this chapter trough.

Three big things:

1. Liar a has no jurisdiction so she can arrest nobody.

2. She is an alien and I don't see ONI giving their citizens to alien.

3. This is the biggest one, you just gave a foreign power access to a person that can give critical and vital knowledge to them, that is a huge hindsight.

Liara is outside his jurisdiction and has no authority to apprehend a prisoner within foreign territory, and as far as I know, the forerunners have left their technology and information to their culture to humans and not another alien race, and Ashley is quite capable of showing sympathy with the insurgents.
I believe that the mantle must be some kind of burden that humanity must carry and they have chosen humans to prepare themselves for some eventual crisis that might fall on the galaxy.
To stop using this technology or to drop it into the wrong hands can only make matters worse, see the case of the covenants destroying whole humans planets and almost exterminated the entire galaxy because of its leaders, the accidental release of the flood.
The Council can see this attack as a weakness and try to overthrow the UNSC and its allies by stealing technology and instigating a revolt in the colonies.

This is geting interesting, I have my doubts regarding council member making arrest on the assembly sovereign territory, also I am pretty sure energy shields dont work like you made them work in the scene where a bullet snaps the spine of the MP, the kinetic energy should effect the whole body, othervise those shields would be really inefficient

Waiting for Glasslands to Swamplands update.

The fuck is going on currently? Hooked man ... Go on...

Don't listen to the guy below me. Forerunner tech was left behind on purpose by the forerunners! Is it hypocritical? No. Why? It was left for us!

Honestly, I agree that the current human government uses too much alien tech. Sarah Palmer constantly rips on the covenant for "stealing stuff that doesnt belong to them," when thats pretty much all the unsc tried to do for the majority of the war and the years after. The hypocrisy of it irritates the heck out of me, innovation has gone flying out the window with the use of forerunner stuff.

A good chapter, but i am not convinced about ONI letting Liara taking Durand away. What are the chances any intelligence officer, let alone an Oni one, would let the man go when he was connected to someone, the "rebel general", that knew of the existence of Halo? Even if its a slim chance the secret was shared, there is borderline no positive in letting an alien government take hold of Durand. Even without Halo - an unacceptable chance anyway - he probably still knows a measure of potential military secrets. It is just... unbelievable.