| Reviews for Conquer the Champions |
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   BlackCatsCursedOne chapter 1 . 7/5/2019 My brain hurts this story jumps around to much |
| te.nellis chapter 10 . 1/15/2017 Cool. Keep it up! |
| god of all chapter 10 . 1/15/2017 Great chapter and story so far please continue this story soon. |
| god of all chapter 9 . 12/29/2016 Great chapter and story so far please continue this story soon. |
| te.nellis chapter 9 . 12/28/2016 Hell yeah! Keep it up! |
| te.nellis chapter 8 . 12/28/2016 Ingenious! Keep it up! |
| te.nellis chapter 7 . 12/28/2016 Lol that was great! Keep it up! |
| te.nellis chapter 6 . 12/28/2016 There we go! That was terrific! Keep it up! |
| te.nellis chapter 5 . 12/28/2016 Fantastic! Keep it up! |
| te.nellis chapter 4 . 12/28/2016 Glorious. Keep it up! |
| te.nellis chapter 3 . 12/28/2016 Lol the messages were awesome. Keep it up! |
| te.nellis chapter 2 . 12/28/2016 Oooooh that was pretty great. Keep it up! |
| te.nellis chapter 1 . 12/28/2016 Excellent start. I love it. Keep it up! |
| WhiteEagle1985 chapter 8 . 11/28/2016 A very interesting story so far! I will look forward to reading more! |
| Guest chapter 2 . 10/13/2016 I've only made it to chapter two so far. You start new paragraphs when someone speaks, which is very good, but you also need new paragraphs when you switch speakers. In chapter two, at least, this is not happening. Also, break up the wall of words into shorter paragraphs; I noticed a few places where this could and should be done. In some of those huge paragraphs, the mass of sentences hurts the eyes. Finally, watch the tenses. You've switched back and forth between present and past tense. You've mostly stuck with past tense, which I do prefer. So, it would be easier/faster for you to edit the present tense out of the story. |
